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Blackbirds

Blackbirds for sale:
They'll whistle pretty tunes from their cages.
They're well-suited for our cold climate.
Novelties for your home
During the winter months.
Pretty little blackbirds for sale.

Blackbirds for sale:
They'll sing haunting tunes from their shackles.
They've adapted well to our warm climate from their own.
Necessities for your field
During planting and harvesting seasons.
Strong young blackbirds for sale.

Author notes

No, I wasn't listening to Molasses to Rum when I wrote this, promise. >>;
"Blackbirds for SAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAALE. Fondle 'em, fondle 'em..."

February 2008

Creative Writing I;
Prompt: contrast poem

Blackbirds: United States & Confederate States
Yes, "blackbirds" refers to slaves in the second stanza.

Notes for contest: Option 6.
Not my favourite that I've written, but it relates to the Civil War. :B

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  • xeroabyss II
    February 20
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    "Fondle'em" ?????


    • Cathartic Denouement
      February 20

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      Haha, it's from "Molasses to Rum" in 1776; it's not dirty.
      It's like, "Hey, check out your merchandise before you buy."


  • ourgirlFriday
    October 10, 2008
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    True;

    Reminds me of the Underground railway and the quilts left on window sills of houses to indicate a house of refuge - it was all a code, a metaphor of hiding under God's caring protection. This is good; I'm glad you explained a little in your notes, because for a while there I was confused.