simone feels cold air
nibble dawn around its edges
and watches Lake Erie
exhale drops of September
upon her skin.
In a list
A contest entry
- September Morning by Lavender Butterfly.
450 points, ended September 14, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Constructive Criticism
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Outstanding poem thank you so much for entering
this was excellent
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Woo, this deserves the gold! You were productive this weekend! Some really good work too Ms. Ally
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Whadafluff...
all my words just disappeared... ok, let's start over.
Basically, I said that I loved the words you used, especially the imaging of nibbling dawn, that one was really interesting
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Oh, and who's simone?
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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The poem was from a picture prompt, and I gave the nameless woman in the picture a name. I chose a French name because it was the painter's nationality.
Glad you enjoyed it. 
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Very Nice!!
Congrats on the gold.
Don
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This is immensely clever and captivating... x
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