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Biker Babes Playground


 

 

 

 

 

 

Her body lay across his
bodies entwined
pleasantly

Heat stricken

with passion between

his legs

 

She's embedded

cascading delicately

devouring him whole

 

Hearts beat faster

pulsating at rapid speeds

pushing one another

 

His max

has been exceeded

she has won once more

 

Playfully tickling him

teasing his master mind

angelically

A contest entry

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    Well.. she sounds like the best kinda angel

    Love the play on words here! 3 stanza is Wootalicious!!!

    Whole thing is fab !


  • Galaxy2
    September 15, 2008
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    Wow...
    you 'devor' so beautifuuly!
    may I.......?

    Kisses all over!
    Galaxy2


  • Age of Rain
    September 14, 2008

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    After your first stanza, the following stanzas have two or the word punch, like you flow out and draw us back in suddenly. A kind of sensual rhythm within the poem itself. Nice!


  • Angelflower
    September 14, 2008

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    Oh, you really did a wonderful job here my beautiful niece!! I really love how sensual this is!! and playful in the end you did a really good job! Best of luck in the contest!


    Angel


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    this is one really HOT HOT poem.. wow.. I love it!!! You did an outstanding job my dear daughter..

    that's right set the page on fire, and fog my monitor so I can't see anything..

    good luck in the contest

    mommy


    • Asylaarix
      September 14, 2008
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      LOL! Fog your monitor eh?
      Well, I must be doing something right! lmao
      Too funny
      You are far too cute mommy!

      TT


      • Sweet Impatience gold member
        September 14, 2008
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        me funny??? no way.. lol

        and you think that your muse is sliding.. hmm I don't think so

        • Asylaarix
          September 14, 2008
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          LOL ... yesh you!

          My muse is sliding, damn thing can't seem to stay in one place!

          finding it lately has been complicating!

          haha

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