In my dream last night,
I noticed the coffee cup on the table,
still half-full with jasmine tea,
and the photo album,
popped up against the jar of jam,
next to the slice of stale rye.
The scarf I knitted for you
last Christmas was folded over
the broken coat hanger
that you tried to fix.
Postcards lay scattered
besides the newspaper,
and the scrapbook
I started for you sat
above the pair of glasses
that you forgot to take.
Where was the bottle
of champagne we started
on last New Year?
The dream-catcher you
sent from Mexico
hung from the balcony,
across from the potted cactus
you insisted on buying.
Last night, I played the
music box I got you,
and I pretended that it was
your voice next to me.
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Ah yes, I have been there.
Good take on the lying to yourself aspect of lies.
also, excellent imagery. Stick to the concrete stuff, stay away from all the crappy "and then the sky was like tear-stained coffee rinds on a plastic medallion" stuff I see on this site. -
this was a wonderful piece, full of such beautiful emotions. i loved it. keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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Wonderful. Really heartfelt.
Thanks so much for entering my contest. Good luck! ♥ -
Very nice! It is also very descriptive. Good luck and thank you for entering my contest!
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This is a touching piece of loss, love, and reminiscence. I love the images, pictures of little, everyday things that mean a lot. The last few lines are filled with loneliness. Good job using images to convey emotions. A well-written piece.
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Beautiful
This is a uniquely descriptive piece on the little things about loving someone. I really enjoyed this. Best of wishes in my contest. Yours in poetry,
gypsy
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Hello. This is a nice observational piece, there is another one of yours that I remember of a similar vein; your observational ones are touching and poignant for you don't go all melodramatic. I think that is what makes it more evocative and relatable. I wish you well in the contest. My regards.
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Beautiful poem I can so relate too. Very heartfelt words. Love's sweet memories do haunt our dreams. Thank you for entering this lovely poem and best of luck in the contest. Sandy
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