If my heart were displayed for all to see on this page.
Surely, you would see me as though I were on a stage.
The joy and the pain painted vividly upon the back drop.
Emotions would be nothing more than just another prop.
Then the director could just simply say "cut".
However, life and love are not just games to be played.
Every bad has a reward and good has a price to be paid.
It would be so much easier to just turn off all of this.
Then, it would only be the tragedy that I would surely miss.
Why must I define myself only by the sorrow I keep.
In my soul I keep locked away the brave hero to this show.
Whose face you think that you have already learned to know.
But, the face that you have seen has just been pretending.
The real me knows that this world may soon be at an ending.
As this act has been written and cast by fate.
Though everyone plays their part to near complete perfection.
I fumble through all my lines and constantly need direction.
Then comes the moment that all in the crowd seem to demand.
It is now time for this pathetic show to come to an end.
As the final curtain falls upon this tragic actor.
A contest entry
- Rhymed prewrites only ... by ecrivain01.
750 points, ended November 14, 2008, 61 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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Not bad ...
but it's "paid", not "payed".
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Wow-I am getting chills from reading this! You did an excellent job penning this and the rhyme, the flow, the lights, it all comes together to create one of the best poems I have read. I don't know who will win this contest, although you do have a very fair chance.
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simply flawless
Emotions would be nothing more than just another prop
Outstanding line right there!
Your Lexicon is in full form and your literary head is definately on!
I dare say this is the best poem you've ever written K,
it's all there.
The rhythm the rhyme the flow the thought provoking gestures, every line speaks such honesty from within that can be applied to everyone in some way-it's hard to crucify (metaphorically speaking) your entire satire aswell as inner self on a piece of paper without too much repitition and/or losing the audience. You have managed to do this...flawlessly...
Amazing work here old friend,
you have rendered another word smith speechless
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wow, amazing. i love the message of the poem. its truely a master piece. and for that, i thank you for entering!
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This was beautifully written and so full of emotion. very sad too. My favorite lines are...
But, the face that you have seen has just been pretending.
The real me knows that this world may soon be at an ending
...they really make you think about what it is that you are saying. It's subtle yet gets the point across. Great job!
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You have a great way with words!
Bravo
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Wow, this is amazing! Emotional image was portrayed greatly...lovely write!
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Wow!!! This was amazing and breath taking, you just made such a great image in my head and I saw it all as though it was a real play. Wonderful!!
I love these lines:
"However, life and love are not just games to be played.
Every bad has a reward and good has a price to be payed."
and these:
"As this act has been written and cast by fate."
It's great!
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Breath taking to say the least.....
The vivid imagery painted upon the minds canvas while reading this was truly elegant. The words chosen in each stanza truly make the reader feel the heart felt emotion poured into this. A true poet bares their soul in words for all to see. Well done!
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