im lost for words,
my imagination is blank,
feels like my heart is being peirced with a thousand swords,
with every word the baby never said i sank,
even though i did not know the lil on i need him ever so dearly,
I hope that you can see clearly,
your mother was not ready,
for her life to go steady,
we will be with you young one,in that beautiful sky,
so then we all can fly,
you where loved the short time you where here.
R.I.P
Author notes
On september 5th 2008 will be a day to remember that a baby did not want to be born to this earth. The baby was aborted his mother was not ready but now she feels the pain of a lossed child. She should have never did it. the baby was 5 months he was kicking an everything. The day I seen a poor inocent child go in the ground with no choice to live or go I myself would never do that to the life I was creating in my stomach. Baby even though you where not mine I never got to feel a touch, kick,kiss, an strength. I love you lil one.
R.I.P
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Very sad lass...
the emotion of the piece transcended to the reader in a powerful way.
You did a good job of conveying your feelings in a poetic way.
Blessings Lass,
Lowell Poe. -
needs a little work.
For the most part I like this poem. I like the raw emotion and pain you express your loss with. I'm so sorry your going threw this it's not a easy choice you made. And we all judge ourselves the hardest. I would just say keep writing and try to forgive yourself. The only thing I would say is try to polish this up a little bit.
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I think that this is sad somethings are not meant to happen in this world and I cant understand how this happend but we all have choices I am not saying weather I feel it is right or wrong but rather a personal choice. Thanks for sharing and also
I think you might want to fix line five it seems to be missing a word
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