What is this spell you have cast upon me?
With nothing more than a simple hello,
My heart begins to race.
At even the slightest hint of your attention,
My breathing becomes erratic.
Your smile is as an entrancing sunset.
Your perfume, disconcertingly intoxicating.
When our eyes meet I am captivated,
Incapable of even the simplest thoughts.
Upon being offered an embrace,
My soul is consumed by the fires of joy.
I know if ever our lips were to meet,
I would be lost in an insurmountable bliss.
Alas, it would be foolish of me to assume I could ever
hold sway in the kingdom of your heart;
And even more foolish to think our involvement could
ever venture beyond the confines of friendship...
So I will remain silent and painfully resigned to the
reality of my insignificance;
Patiently awaiting the next time you smile for me.
A contest entry
- Beautiful minds....please enter. by islekine.
760 points, ended January 11, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - This Heart Of Mine. by TheSpiralGenerator.
750 points, ended July 4, 102 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You have shared ...
a truth and genuine honesty with your poem and I'm sure that a lot of folks have sensed the same sort of feelings that you describe. You have felt love at its most natural state, good for you, and yet I was uncomfortable with your second to last line ... "the reality of my insignificance" ... That line seemed to erase all that was previously made beautful! Friendship should make you feel cherished and is nothing to be taken for granted (IMHO)! It alone has given you significance, don't you think? joy
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Heartfelt sentiments...
I was lucky to find my husband 33 plus years ago...
we are true soul mates and are really blessed with an abundance of love...of course we have our bad times, too! BUT you gotta take the bad with the good!
Best wishes in the contest...and always!
Write on!
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It's always the words unspoken that hurt the most.The third and second-to-last lines are so powerful, and something that I have lived through so many times, without ever learning the truth abut who I am.
Bravissimo, poet. Good luck.
Zach -
ichigosama
that's so wonderful. sounds like you've been in love quite the many times, huh? well, i think it's amazing and well written. good luck in the contest! -
I know how you feel here, I've been left feeling this way too, as if someone has some control over me.
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Wow! I feel almost as if you wrote my very own thoughts.. Great write!!
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Beautiful!
Such romance in every line with lovely language and flawless flow ...
Lynda
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