my shadow glows
against brick buildings
and i think of you.
a buzz consumes my soul
and i wish on the full moon
that wavers, uncertain
behind a small town bell tower.
the cigarette in my hand is you
and i inhale, deeply.
hoping for your scent to seep
into my lungs and hair, to leek
out into the damp night.
beneath all my remembering
there is a sadness
that’s unexplainable.
i let that fact burn
right down to the filter.
Author notes
help me edit by leaving wonderfully critical critques!
peace to all ~flight
A contest entry
- Do you understand ... by EvilKate.
1400 points, ended November 7, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honesty
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I apologise profoundly for the delay in judging. I had some serious health issues to deal with and, for reparation I will be sending each participant some points by way of sincere apology. Thank you for your entry.
Killer ending and a wonderful build toward that moment. The over-arching metaphor is perfectly set. All in all, a very adroit work.
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thank you! and i totally understand the delay,
not a big deal at all!!
peace to all ~flight
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i missed this one sorry love!~
but to be honest i cant really be critical on this; to me it flows very well and its not missing anything. i loved loved loved the ending
keep it up!
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