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Missing

Everyday when I awake,
seconds turn into hours-
causing my heart to break.


Everything seems the same,
even in my dreams-
I see you and I scream.


Living my life

making
streams of

tears


reality brings fears


And I wonder if
you're as miserable as I am

 

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  • chilali
    December 11, 2008

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    WOW! What great and intense emotions portrayed in this piece. Congratulations on the Gold

    Much love
    Ylova


  • aboomer silver member
    September 14, 2008
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    Great emotion - and great last line!
    Congrats on the well-deserved Gold!!


  • suseann
    September 14, 2008

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    That compassionate inclusion of wondering beneath the same stars made this a fine piece worthy of it's merited gold.


  • Lady Ilia Elenus
    September 14, 2008
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    I love the last lines. Congrats on the Gold.


  • LionessK
    September 14, 2008
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  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    September 14, 2008
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    I love the way that you wrote this!
    You did a wonderful job putting this
    deep and sad write together here.
    Congratulations to you on your this
    well deserved gold trophy! Keep up
    the wonderful work here and thanks
    so much for sharing this one!




    Jeremy0826


  • Blooming Poet
    September 13, 2008

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    to me, the way you arranged it by putting thee picture at the bottom is unique and I like it. As for the poem, lovely poem, that really moved me by the amazing emotions displayed


  • maralisa silver member
    September 13, 2008
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    a brilliant take on the promt very deeply penned emotionsgood luck in the contest


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    September 13, 2008

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    Well, you sure nailed this one.
    A great piece of interpretation from the prompt, and definately something to waken the emotions in the readers, well done.


  • KayJay
    September 13, 2008
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    Nicely done with great emotion... Best of luck.
    Ken


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    this is a powerful piece
    sad....deep... thanks for sharing
    wishin you the best

    love

    Passions

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