your scent
hung lazily
in the air
and i remembered
every single word you said
like ghosts were speaking
in my ear
'I. will. never. forget. you.'
every word punctuated
in suspended animation.
'whenever you see our sky.
please. try not to cry.
I will never leave your
side.'
Your dying words
will. never. fade.
Author notes
i took from both prompts
A contest entry
- I'm sick and bored...so I started a quickie by Blooming Poet.
950 points, ended September 13, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is a very beautiful piece, my friend!
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omfg
beautiful hubby
very well penned
warmest,
Mylee -
I like how you used a little bit of each prompt to create this
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I appreciate the dirty pretty in this poem. It almost reminds of like a 9/11 song or something.
Good job
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Nice take on both prompts... the sad farewell, wonderfully portrayed in your words... bring emotion to the picture and bring it to life... Well done and best of luck...
Ken
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