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Just a Moment ~ for Al






Dusk comes swiftly

on silent feet.




He sees its approach

as he stands

between

curtains cast open

to capture fading light;




he pauses, just a moment,

to consider shadows

both menacing and mild.


A corner of his mouth lifts,

his eyes dark with memory.



He tugs securely on his hat


and picks up a jacket

to ward off the imminent arrival


of wild winds swirling

through a striated, pearlescent sky,



grabs his keys

to many doors

and strolls quietly



into slow sounds of nightfall,

an echo of boots in the distance,

striding into a beckoning unknown,




still believing





the sun will rise...








Author notes











With admiration...


Read the man. He's brilliant. Really.


http://www.allpoetry.com/AJ%20Morelli



"Ella Fitzgerald Live, 1957" is on PBS while I'm posting this.

She's singin' "Tenderly".

Cool. It fits.

I dunno quite why, but I imagine the hat as a fedora.


lol








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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    December 14, 2008
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    This is a perfectly done, especially in regards to Al.


    • Night Hope gold member
      December 14, 2008
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      I was pleased he & Mary both liked it. Now I'm especially pleased that you do, as well. Thank you, Sweetie. I didn't write this one immediately, right off the top of my head, like most of 'em. I left it on simmer for awhile & for some reason, it kept comin' up feelin' like film noire. Go figure. Don't ask me, I just hold onto the pen...sometimes for dear Life, as I always say. Thanks, as always, for hosting such inspiring contests, my Friend...& they always seem to catch me at just the right moment, too, which only proves your timing is impeccable. Merry, merry.


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    October 5, 2008

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    Thank you so much Wanda, this is beautiful....


    congratulations on the bronze

    al


    • Night Hope gold member
      December 14, 2008
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      Ooops...missed this one. You're quite welcome, Al. Happiest of holidays to you & yours.


  • zochit2me gold member
    September 25, 2008
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    How serene and full of depth as well as texture.

    sigh...

    ♥Becky♥


  • Kagome27
    September 20, 2008
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    Wonderful

    This was a great piece thank you for sharing.


  • omkumari
    September 20, 2008
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    very catchy

    makes us tread along with our silent feet...
    a beautiful piece!!!


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    September 17, 2008

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    "an echo of boots in the distance,
    striding into a beckoning unknown,

    still believing

    the sun will rise..."

    i really have a lotta nerve to post a poem in a contest full of such wonderful poetry. this is among the best.

    ...definitly, a fedora

  • Suzanne Dia
    September 15, 2008

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    I love the perspective on his work; how each of us takes something different from it..

    the night feels friendly to me when I read his words
    and morning - too stark, too real, no haze to the edges of life.

    you seem to take just the opposite

    and I think that is beautiful.



    • Night Hope gold member
      September 15, 2008
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      Actually, he's so versatile, I take a few varied images & memories away from reading his work. This was just one of many. I've had similar reactions to yours, as well. Thank you, Suzi. I loved your tribute & I'm sure Al & Mary will, too.

  • anatomy
    September 15, 2008

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    What a great tribute. I really get the sense of him in this . Good luck in the contest. Beautiful work as always.


  • katfair
    September 14, 2008

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    lovely tribute for al

    capturing the light
    the pause
    the shadows
    of the man and his words

    the nightfall of him

    the curtains and sky

    k


  • Sonja
    September 14, 2008

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    So tender and gentle picture framed with your words of poetry as always are so nice. It was my pleasure to read this one too.
    ~Sonja~


  • kaibab silver member
    September 14, 2008

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    Scratch his footsteps on ink-stained earth, scribe to honor one more poet...lovely this is...

  • mimiagatha
    September 14, 2008

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    when you break the frame of your style and invade a completely new one and create all this wonder and incredible beauty of new worlds, strange and yet... i wouldn’t have mistaken it being yours. can beauty be impeccable? it can, your beauty of word is.


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    September 14, 2008
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    Now where did my comment go?????

  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    September 14, 2008

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    He is brilliant and this is a brilliant honor poem for such. He loves conciseness and this does it perfectly. Bravo to you both.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    what a joy to read today... such a beautiful piece



  • Nicolette gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    You are perhaps the one person who can write tributes like no other, Vlindertjie and I agree with Mary, you have set the bar here and it's high!! Wonderful poetry that does him and his talent proud!!



    ~ Nicolette


  • arafura gold member
    September 14, 2008
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    A great tribute to your friend! He will be thrilled.


  • transcendental baby gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    You always have such lovely and giving things to say to your friends ... that's why you're such a sweetie I'll have to go read AJ after such a lovely recommendation. I'm pretty sure I have before, but I have the memory of a snail

  • Lord Gegishov
    September 13, 2008
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    This is a very nice piece indeed!


  • Cat
    September 13, 2008
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    wow... beautiful wanda.. just beautiful...

    you have set a bar

    m

    • Night Hope gold member
      September 14, 2008
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      Awww, shucks, M'am.

      Thank you so much, Mary. I'm pleased you thought it to be a worthy tribute to such a man, such a Scribe. His work is so inspiring, so powerful in its imagery, brevity, honesty. Thanks for hosting, Sweetie. As I said, he deserves it, & you're a wonderful Friend to pay homage to him in this way.

  • Rowan gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    I believe you've written a poem for Al, every man, woman, and poet. What a vision, tribute, and lesson
    on device.


  • dame de la riviere
    September 13, 2008

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    Oh you beautiful lady this is perfectly fabulous! The description is so insanely vivid and drawing for one line to the next in a quiet tugging sort of way...I wanted it to be a novel so I could keep reading: find out where he's going...something more. And the author's note is great; that's the hat I thought of too! Awesome that that song was playing while you posted this; she is a phenominal singer.

  • Eusebius
    September 13, 2008

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    Ah, a fine poem and the first two lines really do grab you and pull you down into the poem. Loved it... bravo... bravo..


  • tomisb
    September 13, 2008

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    Nice use of epigram and post script. Normally I find to pretensious but in this case, it really bookended nicely.

    Your landscape and his presence in it describes beautifully his attempt and pretense of control over the situation. It makes for a stark landscape and almost a sense of cavelier attitude on his part. yet you capture well the feeling of aloneness we have with the final stopping place of fate.

    Love, Tom B.


  • Cannonsfire
    September 13, 2008
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    Yes it fits him C


  • just mercedes gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    Beautiful poem. I've caught sight of Al on the site, but have at best a nodding acknowledgement. I'll follow up the link.

    I love 'his keys to many doors'


  • DogFish silver member
    September 13, 2008

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    Al is a hidden treasure I've heard romours of on the site...now that I have a map I'll have to go find him.

    Very nice tribute!


  • poet2angels gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    This is exquisite...

    "he pauses, just a moment,

    to consider shadows

    both menacing and mild."

    I have not had the pleasu
    re of meeting "AJ", but from what you say, I am inclined to read his work. He sounds like a wonderful poet and person...

    Another great dedication, my friend...

    Lynda

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