anger and fear held close
jagged edges of self-worth
bruises caused by shallow emotions
fearful minded is where
venom spits hate back at you
couldn't miss you more if I tried...
Author notes
Prompt 1:
I couldn't miss you less if I tried
A contest entry
- I'm sick and bored...so I started a quickie by Blooming Poet.
950 points, ended September 13, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Sadly
It seems to be a sign of the times. But our world of material values , to excess, defines who we are. And yes there is much venom.
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Ouch! This bites! Hope its not poisonous! LOL Great emotional poetry with just a few lines dear lady. I wish you well in the Comp!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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i Like
the venom is perfect word ...lol ...Nice flow ...katie
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Very nicely done, great use of the prompt.
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gosh
you surely made me believe that the one being 'missed' might wanna stay missing! l.o.l. but that's just me..wow this had some real bite to it.
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wonderful emotions here
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The emotions of hatred really come out in this poem here. You did good in bringing out the pain she might be feeling.
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Well done... raw emotion brings truth to your words and makes the point... Great interpretation. Best of luck...
Ken
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