Lying abed after a long, hot night,
Your naked body's a wonderful sight.
You breathe so softly when you are asleep.
This is an image that I'll always keep
Like an old photograph in black and white
To recall once more when I'm alone at night
Author notes
Option 2: Photo Credit: image found on art.uk.com (per judge).
A contest entry
- Adult Quickie by Sweet Impatience.
950 points, ended September 14, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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awesome rhyme flow here. Simple structure and short poem, but very effective and fun. Well done on your gold place.
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting. I appreciate that very much, along with the two smiling reindeer.
Mike
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aww no wonder you won gold this is so sexy and pretty at the same time lol.. idk what im saying at the moment... congrats cuz!
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I am glad you enjoyed this. I can't do hardcore. This is about what I am up to. Thank you for reading and commenting.
Mike
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I like this - great wording and depth of emotion. Wonderful rhyme. I especially like your last 2 lines.
best wishes in the contest.
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Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed the poem. Your comments are appreciated.
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a sweet seduction...very well done...i find it difficult to make something this sensual come off sweet too...and it's my favorite subject to write on...you'd think i wouldn't be so harsh. i admire this..the simplicity is the beauty...the image is the heartbeat- and i don't mean the provided image...i mean the written image. excellent love love it
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Thank you very much. I am glad you enjoyed the poem. Your comments are much appreciated. It was an enjoyable prompt.
Mike
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bravo. this is gorgeous Mike. It really is. I think you don't give yourself enough credit. Who cares about erotic anyway, when you have this sensuality just going untouched? This is beautiful, your lady wil love it,
nice entry.
Again, go you
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jin
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I don't feel that I have done a sensual one that has really come out the way I wanted it to.
Mike
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Wow, a wonderful memory indeed!
I love the sensuality in your words
and the thought that you put into
this. Beautiful work and good luck!
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I am glad you enjoyed this poem. Thank you very much for reading and commenting.
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This is awesome, tight rhythm and rhyme...not too erotic, a great level of sensuality..Enjoyed reading what you did with the pic
Hope you do well
Cind's
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I am glad you enjoyed it. My erotica is not very erotic. I do this type of poem much better. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Mike
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WOW!! excellent job with this prompt. the rhyme and the flow are absolutely wonderful. this is a beautifully written poem. a memory, like a snapshot held in time. this is fantastic.
Good luck in the contest
kat
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting. I enjoyed your contest. You put up great prompts. The gold cup is greatly appreciated.
Mike
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YES!
This was awesome
The rhythm and flow was a-mazing!
Beautifully done
Good luck to you
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I am glad you enjoyed it. I don't do erotica well, the best they can be classified as is sensual. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Mike
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