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Mans Perfection

Shimmering softness bright in all it's glory

a moment for a woman to tell her story

Laid to rest upon her empty bed

with tears in her eyes that she begin to shed

 

Passions promise has again come to play

she asks him to promise her he will stay

Pleasent roaming of gentle hands

a man so perfect who understands

 

 

 

 

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  • Myjoy gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    This too again touched me very deep. It is sad the emotions expressed yet hopeful too. Well done dear.


  • aboomer silver member
    September 15, 2008
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    Congrats on the Bronze!


  • CoundessaScarlotti
    September 14, 2008

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    I loved the imagery you set down in this piece, the flow is brilliant.

    If you find such a man, kindly point him in my direction.


  • Justmenow
    September 14, 2008

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    Passions promise has again come to play

    she asks him to promise her he will stay

    Pleasent roaming of gentle hands

    a man so perfect who understands




    i love this verse, this is a great write with a lot of well written imagery, well done for this brilliant write, i truly mean it.

    x


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    September 14, 2008

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    Such a sad yet gorgeous write!
    You painted such a lovely piece
    with your words my friend!
    Good luck and thanks for sharing
    it here!




    Jeremy0826


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    this is a beautiful poem, that I love very much. I really love the second stanza so very much. you painted a loving, sensual picture with your words alone.

    Fantastic job with both the prompt & your poem


    good luck in the contest

    kat


    • Asylaarix
      September 14, 2008
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      Thank you for bronze!!
      I didn't think it was that good
      Thank you for making my day!

      TT


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    September 13, 2008

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    Very nicely done. I like this alot. It shows that women think that there are still decent men out there.

    Great job.

    Mike

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