Roses are dying and it is all for me?
As I look at the washing machine I cry.
Cleaning for two has become cleaning for one.
It spins like my life.
Eventually it will be done.
Done like me.
I wipe away my pity tears sliding down my cheeks.
That is all I want they say
Pity.
I would be ecstatic if that were true.
If only it was true.
Alone forever is what I fear,
Alone forever is what I despise.
Yet the washer spins as the cycle moves toward the end.
I close my eyes.
They say I am hopeless,
Maybe they are right.
Yet, my doctor tells me I am healthy,
Yet, at night I hold my pillow tight,
The nighttime tears scold my pathetic existence.
The pillow drowns my whaling
They say a God loves me.
I laugh.
They say prayer will help me.
I laugh.
They tell me I’ll be fine,
I cry with the knowledge of the truth.
Roses are dying.
The rain is pouring.
The sky is dark.
My blood rains.
My life rains.
My existence rains.
They find me in the morning’s somber light.
I am in the garden face down in the mud.
As they lift me they realize
They have come to find.
They find.
The washing machine has finished its cycle
Please tell me what you think
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Oh the cycles of life...of sorrow...happiness...hope and bitter despair.
I felt this in the very soul of me.
The imagery you chose is so very imaginative and used so effectively.
I have to say this is sad and dark...but I certainly enjoyed every word.
Thank you so much for sharing and may smiles come your way.
Az
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Quite an intriguing and experimental choices you made while depicting the imageries and the thoughts behind..yet quite powerful impact with..well done..
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so sad
this is so sad, but it's also so beautiful, i just love the way that it flows, i re-read it a couple of times to get the full effect. the last stanza kind of reminds me of "Hamlet" where Ophelia dies/kills herself. i also really like the parts about other people's suggestions and laughing at them, since depression is something so personal you need to find your own way out one suggestion though the background makes it a little hard to read, but the writing itself is good. sorry if i rambaled i just really enjoyed this a lot
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I would first like to let you know I read your home page briefly. Secondly I would like to say, without meaning to sound patronising so I apologise if I do, well done for having the strength to do all you can to help yourself.
This poem is extremely heartfelt. I could feel every clench of emotion and pain you threw into this. Also, I loved how you compared life to something so everyday; a washing machine cycle. That image will never leave my mind.
Thanks for sharing this.
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Wow, this is so sad. I read your page, and I am glad to see that it seems like you are doing better now. I hope that is the case. This poem is beautifully written and obviously comes from real life experiences. I hope things continue to get better for you. You are a very talented writer!!! Great job!
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