Breathe.
the hunger clawing my desire up her neck
down my stomach and legs flesh to flesh
enjoying flesh ignoring guilt and
ready to dive into flesh
sin again again no end
Breathe.
red lights in my eyes and i cry scream cry father
told me it would happen again if i was bad
he loves me so that he loves to
ignore my woe and pain to
teach me to be a man
Breathe.
bullets whizzing like missiles people dropping
like the sand surrounding we're
drowning in our own blood
that's pounding with
adrenalin
Breathe.
my head down walking aimless place-less being
nowhere no-one no-time no-love no-heart
no-song no-give no-gift no-smile
no-frown no-opinion along
with no-life
Breathe.
forget
Breathe.
forget
Breathe.
Author notes
1st stanza=being a cheater
2nd stanza=abuse
3rd stanza=Iraqi-US war
4th stanza=depression
Each stanza is something one would try to "Forget."
A contest entry
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Comments
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nice usage of characters...i loved each stanza...beautifully described imagery...
loved these lines particularly
my head down walking aimless place-less being
nowhere no-one no-time no-love no-heart
no-song no-give no-gift no-smile
no-frown no-opinion along
with no-life
it's exactly what i am going through...maybe thats why...
good luck
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okay, the author's notes definatly helped explain it- i might have gotten it without that hint, but maybe not
it's a good poem though
thank you for entering!
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