Life becomes a blur,
As my thoughts of you go deeper.
My mind begins to spiral,
As your beauty engulfs my eyes.
Wanting to be with you forever,
Not wanting to say any goodbyes.
So tell me what i'm meant to do,
With all these feelings for you,
And tell me what to do,
Cause when I dream its only of you,
And I don't know what to do.
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oo nice!
feeling like that now...
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"So tell me what i'm meant to do,
With all these feelings for you,
And tell me what to do,
Cause when I dream its only of you,
And I don't know what to do."
Amazing write is all i can say its beautiful
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awwww.....omg wat an sweet poem who ever u wrote that 4 she should b proud u feel that way bout her omg loved it............oxoxoxoxoxoxoxox,
Adventure
peace love mcr !
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One of the shortest poems ive ever read...but this is astounding. As I read my jaw hangs open.
Nothing sounds awkward. Its all so beautiful. I know this sounds crazy, but whever I read your works, My brain formulates a tune to go with it.
You've got talent. Don't take it for granted. Here, have some clappies.
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Wow
Its such a beautiful poem. It really touches you in the right places (not trying to make it sound perverted peoples) I loves it <3
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Awww..
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This is a really nice poem! I like the overall concept, but perhaps you can go into depth just a bit more? It leaves the reader kind of curious on what you're thinking about ^_^
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wow this is really good I like it -
I really to the power of a billion loved this!
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i like this poem it is really good!
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i love thz poem you are really good wt words keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I like this good job.
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I LOVEEEEEE THIS!!! OMG UR SO GOOD
-SYNNLEE
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I love it
Very well written and beautifully said I love it
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wow
very good i wish some one would feel the some way about me !!!!
love always
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pretty =]
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wow, it goes soo well and amazingly done
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Awesome my English Brother!
Great love poem dude!
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Writen Like A Song
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Awww... i can relate. Love this!
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wow this is beautiful and so are you. keep up the good work. and ill see you around. ((LOVEALWAYS)) _Rain_Bow_
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this is so romantic <3
"wanting to be with you forever/not wanting to say any goodbyes" thats my favor line it reminds me of how i feel about my boyfriend, go tell this girl how you feel about her, you'll definitaly make her happy -
Aww I like this one alot!! It reminds me of me because I love someone and I told her about it but she doesn't understand. That is the only difference. But anyway good job!!
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Awwe Davey that was soo sweet it wasnt even funny!!.
I loved it..keep it up!.
So, How bout them pancakes?. lol.
Aliboo.
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beautiful that is one lucky girl, you should talk to her about it if u havent already
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"Not wanting to say any goodbyes."
great write XD what else is there to say? O.o
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how ever she is u need to tell her how u fill an not keep it up in your mind tell her
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This is so amazing. You really described what it feels like to wanna be with someone forever but not really knowing what to do
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wow
wow that sounds like something that i would write but i didn't you did so yeah it's just breathe taking
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Awe thats an amazing write. I know how you feel..
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It's Beautiful and i can definatly relate!
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thxs for reading ^^
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awwww its cutie...me myself have felt this and still do feel this way bout this person but im actually with them but i love this....it is soooo cute
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thxs for the comment
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Aww
That is beautiiful... I know that feeling to....
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ty for reading ^^
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this is
a m a z i n g.
the second stanzza is a bit repetitive but in a good way, its like you need to get your point through and you did. really expressive. i loved itt.
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ty ^^
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outstanding
good poem. the first stanza sounds much better than the second one, coz it's much more creative and unique. the second is kinda repeated. (no offence)
but i liked it. i enjoyed eading it. well done David.
sherry
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i'm not offended cause ur right
i just had to find an ending lol
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I'll Tell You What To Do
Tell her you love her.You know you want to go up to her but you get weak in the knees, butterflies in the stomach and palms swet. Well my friends get some stones and tell her lol.... -
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lmao
ty for the advice lol
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wooooo go david lmao i love this poem
-Aimeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
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HEYLO
i liked it a lot, i really truely do. hopefully you write more poems HEHE
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ello
lol thxs
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WOW! I love this poem! It is so deep and captures so many feelings in so little words.
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ty for reading
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OMFG!!!!! tahat was the best poem ive heard in ages!!!
loved it loved it loved it!!!
Savvy
oxox
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OMFG WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
holy crash nebbula david this poem is like deep I love it soo much, you put a lot into this damn it was fricken amazing. yes indeed you are the the most amazing writer ever.
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i like it. good work.
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glad u liked it ^^
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i loved it, it's very direct and to the point. amazing work
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thxs
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i like this poem
it makes me smile
which a smile on me is now a rare sight......
but anyway. i like it.
cute.
brava
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ty for ur comment
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YES!first poem in a long time!i can comment it 2!ummm yea its really great,well its got passion.passion and poetry go well together
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thxs lol
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Awe this poem is really great, i feel this way about a guy except instead of beauty he is so cute and goodllooking =]
Great Job
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ty for the comment
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Great write
I get the impression of an indecive love like it's damn if I love the person, damn if I don't love the person. So you got to decide my friend what side of the fence are you going to stand on you do love the person or you don't. It's your call Great write
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yea but choosing is hard
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Beautiful write, I love the emotion you put in this piece...
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awww! this is so cute, and a very good write. Ur poems are always great this one made me feel gooey inside
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