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Endless love

I take ur hand and u hold me close
I reast my head on ur sholder
We walk down the road and turn on2 a path
I wonder where ur taking me
U answer as if i had said it aloud
"Im taking u where everything is perfect and peaceful"
I laugh cuz nothing is perfect and peaceful anymore
U stop so do i
I see sumthing in ur eyes saying there r things that r still perfect to u
I step closer i take ur hands in mine and u pull them away
U place ur arms around me
U push my hair outa my face
U kiss my lips gently
My head starts to spin u pull away 2 soon
I sigh "I love u" u look away from me off in2 the sunset i think i have said sumthing wrong
U look bac at me and say "There is not enuff time in the world to tell or show how much i love u babe"
I say "try to tell me or show me.U have me till the end of time "

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*age: 14
*name: kate
*are you on this site a lot: yes
*favs?
*what you want to be in my family:sister
*also include a link to the poem that you are most proud of:  http://allpoetry.com/poem/4595167

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  • sapphireangelwings
    September 16, 2008

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    To love someone so much that you want to take forever to tell or show someone that love is amazing. Nice job. One suggestion to polish your piece would be to use spell check. Other than that, nice job.


  • Harlequin Dance
    September 15, 2008
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    Just a question: Is it supposed to have that many spelling errors? I would take your poem more seriously if you spelled things correctly. Right now it just seems amateurish. I don't know, maybe that's how you meant for it to be, but right now the errors are distracting from the poem itself.

  • saretyuiop
    September 13, 2008

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    Beautifully written. I love how you let everyone know there is a little bit a perfection left in this world...


  • Strawberry Wolf
    September 13, 2008
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    i liked this poem a lot! and i'll be your AP sister too.. =]


  • written-in-ink
    September 13, 2008
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    very nice poem and thank you for entering and sure if you want to be my sister!

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