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Not missing you




Any time I feel alone I close my eyes
You are there and I can feel you hold me tight
In my mind I hear the sound of little sighs
And I know we'll share a dream in bed tonight

Though you're far away from me across the sea
Deep inside I know that you are by my side
I'm aware you're always there to set me free
I have cried that you are near but you must hide

In my dreams I kiss your lips and taste your breath
Feel your body close to mine and wide awake
So I know that I am yours until my death
And my love and all I am is yours to take

Hold me close and make me know that you are mine
When we meet I'll taste each sweet and drink your wine





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  • Reptile Lady gold member
    September 17, 2008

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    I know that feeling all to well
    Missing, .. denial of missing
    and the longing to he together
    Thank you for your entry and best wishes
    Julie


  • Bosiarbooger gold member
    September 17, 2008
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    Beautiful

    Another perfect poem, you never let me down. Best of luck to you, Boog


  • JinSays gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    So I know that I am yours until my death
    And my love and all I am is yours to take

    Let me pull my cap down further...this is so very sad. Not missing you, old John Waite song..this makes me want to cry.
    I hate missing anyone. You've made me cry, thanks for that, blessings,
    Jin


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 14, 2008
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    Line 8 over-runs, but I like the way this one flows. Nifty.

    • cricketjeff gold member
      September 14, 2008

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      The first foot on line eight has 4 syllables I guess, in my horrible London way I tend to read "It is not" not just as "it's not" but as "'s'not"


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    Simply close your eyes...
    I am there..

    well.. sounded good.

    Love
    Passions

    good luck to you in the contest

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