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We're No Good...

C an it be that we
O bviously can't just let it go?
D eluding ourselves into thinking
E ventually, together we may grow?
P retending everything is okay
E xcept, really we both know-
N othing is all right,
D espite illusions we might show.

E nough is finally enough,

N ow, we have to let this end.
C ompletely cut it off,
I nstead of alluding we are friends.
E scaping the wrath of dependencies
S o, individually we heal again...

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  • Sheli silver member
    December 4, 2008
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    Too Cool!!!

    sometimes i do this with names of my friends, what can i say, Great Minds... and all of thaat! lol


  • peregrin
    September 21, 2008

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    How creative.
    Just what I wanted, something I don't normally read.
    This is brilliant, the flow really works with the piece.
    It is fan-freaking-tastic.
    Thank you for your entry.


  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    September 18, 2008

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    To me, acrostic-poetry has always been the domain of schoolchildren; Maybe it's the fact that it's the first form of poetry I learned, and seemingly one of the simplest... But there are a few poets on this site who are slowly causing my mind to shift gears, yourself included.

    Being able to write an acrostic that packs an emotional punch takes skill, and you seem to have diction down to a science. This is written very maturely, and with an elegance that surpasses any ever written by my grade-school self Well done, and I wish you luck in the contest.

    Thanks again for your lovely comment on my poem!

    In love and light,
    Laura


  • eatingupyourmind
    September 18, 2008

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    Girl, you amaze me. This is stunning. i'm not normally a fan of acrostic..but with you i defiantly make an acception.


  • Captain Jenny
    September 18, 2008
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    Cool I can never do acrostic for some reason... Great write


  • righteousme
    September 15, 2008

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    but can we ever really let go when our hearts are strung along like the tattered ends of blue jeans ...
    wow i am on a roll today ...
    great piece and i love when you do the acrostics !!!


  • feetus
    September 15, 2008

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    Superlative!

    Clever! Great job, this is superb. Well written with a great message. G'luck in the contest!

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