Can't bring myself to voice goodbye,
the courage flees my soul to say,
the words evade my heart, thereby,
let us just part, each go our way.
The courage flees my soul to say,
the words that choke upon my tongue.
Let us just part, each go our way.
Wish we had met when we were young.
The words that choke upon my tongue
convey that we must sadly end.
Wish we had met when we were young,
'tis just too late for us, my friend
Convey that we must sadly end,
we smile and hug, we give a nod.
'Tis just too late for us, my friend;
this path will bring us both to God.
We smile and hug, we give a nod.
The words evade my heart, thereby,
this path will bring us both to God.
Can't bring myself to voice goodbye.
Author notes
pantoum
Rhyme scheme: ABAB, BCBC, CDCD, DEDE, LAST STANZA: EFEF
A contest entry
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So sad, goodbye is never easy - where's the good in it?
This was brilliant; i can really connect with it, and i think others will also.
thanks for entering
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nice job with the pantoum ... good form and all. thank you for entering
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Thank you for your entry in the final contest of the series. An excellent pantoum with a great rhyme scheme that was a joy to read.
All the best and please join us in any future contests we may run for rhyming poetry.
Sue and Jeff
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This is great! I love the interlocking rhyme fron stanza to stanza. Rich with imagery.
Love,
Amera♥
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What a wonderful take on this prompt! Powerful and full of meaning. You have used a great form and executed it perfectly.
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