I am silent by nature...
You hear the wind and rain through my eyes
But you don't understand why
I am silent by nature...
You see me and think of beauty
But I grew this way because of the storm
But you have forgotten the storm
You see me and think of beauty
I am nothing but the rainbow
The light hits just right and there I am
You stop and stare
I am nothing but the rainbow
My silence says many things to you
And my eyes shield you from my pain
My beauty would not be if it weren't for the rain
My silence says many things to you
There are no sounds from within the rainbow
Only noise and chaos that you do not see
You think silence or chorus but
There are no sounds from within the rainbow
You are so caught in my beauty
That you cannot see my pain
You think inside is just as great
You are so caught in my beauty
Do you not understand
The storm always comes first
Making me who I am?
Do you not understand?
Author notes
Sorry... I was hoping to go another direction and try to make it happy, but it didn't work. I write from the heart and soul... and they are slightly sad.
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I am silent by nature...
You hear the wind and rain through my eyes
But you don't understand why
I am silent by nature...
Although sad it's a beauty...the imagery was great...
and isn't this what we all are...
...made by the storms in our lifes....
XXJeannette
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There is a great deal to like about this poem. The contrast between beauty and sorrow and the cost of beauty. The last stanza summarizes this, "The storm always comes first making me who I am". Thank you for your entry. Peace, Liz
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I again read
this poem. I again enjoyed what you have tried to convey to your readers. The personification is straight forward, at time subtle, other times soft, and there is also the direct, but never harsh. I appreciate the idea of 'beauty after the storm', but you have also added the elements of 'beauty before the storm'. This is my own position on this poem - I still maintain there is room for growth within this poem, and not implying that this is not a worthwhile poem. Thanks for the entry. Frans -
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thanks. it's one of those poems I will probably come back to when the muse hits me for it.
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Definetely an alternate view on rainbows. I enjoyed the variable stanza style and and the repetitions work well to maintain the theme. Wonderful
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Lovely Poem!!!!!!!!
I love rainbows and I can relate with the way you have written this rainbow poem . I too write from the heart and many of my poems start out happy and turn sad. I love the imagery in your poem. I thought the way you repete the lines was very affective and made the poem more heartfelt when read out loud. A pleasure to read.
Take care,
Sandy 
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I think that you
have something here. Whether intended or not, you gave us another way to view a rainbow. Leave the poem for a while, then take it up again. You have something that is dynamics. Frans
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Wow. This is not really what I expected at all! I mean, I expected something kinda sad, but not this. There was a part that had a slight repetition (using storm twice), but other than that, I thought it was good!
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