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More than a ring

He has my heart with him I shall stay
For he is my night and I am his day
Our love is strong and together we grow
Connected eternal we're joined at the soul

We fit together as a hand and glove
For he is my Lark and I am his Dove
No amount of gold can change how I feel
Our love is the finest stronger than steel

I am his Queen and he is my King
We are bound together by more than a ring
He has my heart and with him I shall stay
For he is my night and I am his day

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  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    October 2, 2008

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    Good flow of the unforced rhyming verse.
    Well-Versed & structured.

    I admired the repetition of the lines--

    "He has my heart and with him I shall stay
    For he is my night and I am his day"

    in the opening and concluding stanzas.

    Very well done

    PS>>> I will leave your brother alone !!!


  • Myjoy gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    Beautiful,
    that you can complement each other so well,
    find that common ground of togetherness and harmony.


  • plainoljoe
    September 13, 2008

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    A wonderful dedication to a man who knows how blessed he is to have such a loving spouse

    Joe