As wild winds blow across the violent seas
dark scudding clouds blot out the worthless moon,
the shallop in contempt of sigh and wheeze
spear-heading for the lanterns on the dune.
Dark scudding clouds blot out the worthless moon
while trembling timbers slice through howling squalls,
spear-heading for the lanterns on the dune
the boot-leggers transport illicit hauls.
While trembling timbers slice through howling squalls
the searchlights sweep and scan the inky night,
the boot-leggers transport illicit hauls
through storms they pitch a bold and hostile fight.
The searchlights sweep and scan the inky night
as low slung craft makes port on silent shores,
through storms they pitch a bold and hostile fight
replenishing the dehydrated stores.
As low slung craft makes port on silent shores
the shallop in contempt of sigh or wheeze,
replenishing the dehydrated stores
as wild winds blow across the violent seas.
Author notes
The Pantoum Form
The stanzas rhyme abab, with the second and fourth lines of each stanza reappearing as the first and third lines of the next. To complete the loop, the second and fourth lines of the final stanza are the same as the first and third lines of the first stanza.
A contest entry
- Tour De Monde - Stage 6 by Errant Panther.
300 points, ended October 7, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Well first let me say congrats on the trophy even though it should have been the gold for the caliber of writer that you are... I have never really seen this style before but I did enjoy the poem...
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A wonderful subject to write about, filled with thick imagery for the mind well done and thanks for joining in, Warm thoughts.
Frozentearz -
good subject matter deeply described, not being familiar with the form - notes would have been helpful. It looks quite a challenge but also fun to write. very theatrical in the way the imagery plays out in the mind. well done.
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very interestingly worded and set out, very descriptive, good luck
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This is a fantastic poem
I love the rhythm of your words and the way it reminds me of the sea itself - and the background is very fitting ... I love the part about contempt - it is very well crafted to the tone of the piece! I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Keep writing
Polly
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Excellent pantoum!
Flawless, actually!
I love it! I love the title too
Best of luck!
Lynda
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This is a beautifully written pantoum! Exploding with vivid imagery and excitement of a time long ago..Excellent penning here!!
All my best to you in the contest!!!
Linda
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Simply awesome my friend and congrats in the contest..
God Bless you and yours...
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all this within the confines of a perfect flowing pantoum...excellent imagery and just AWESOME..thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest..it has been an honor competing against you..
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thank you for sharing this, i mean that this was something killer, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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could not resist another read of this. It is the most beautiful art form of poetry I have ever read
Joe -
Excellent
A very fine write, indeed. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done. -
Brilliant
There is not much I could possibly say that hasn't already or is soon to be said. This was brilliant and I don't know the proper name for the form that was used, but I love it. What wonderful flow complimented by vived imagery.
Rhon
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Very powerful imagery. Just a comment, you like adjectives a lot.
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Amazingly well written exapmle of a pantoum. It also reminds of the ways of my dad and his brothers when they ran moonshine back in the day
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