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Spare Me Three Last Words

She wanders through the rubble,
Tears streaming down her twisted face.
Red eyes mixed with black eyeliner.
Her pupils shine green among the dancing flames.

Branches snag her tattered clothes,
Causing her to fall.
On hands and knees,
She has no will to stand.

Chains and locks on her wrists and ankles,
Not letting her move.
Too weak…
She’s losing the fight.

Days of crying and sobbing,
Such pain.
Screaming on the inside,
But her voice won’t work…

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Anissa Sapp

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  • leander Moderators member
    November 27, 2008

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    Well this is quite a sad and emotional poem you've written here, that a lot of people will be able to relate to in some kind of way...

    thank you for entering the contest!
    Leander


  • poetryality silver member
    November 1, 2008

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    I like what you told me here poet but what does she feel about her depressed and bogged down situation? This is a darkly, well written poem but I felt a void, and wanted more at end. Had the rest of the poem been as dipped in emotion as the last line. The work would have been stellar! As is...very finely crafted work, that too is a compliment.

    Thank you for this entry in my challenge and I wish you the best in this contest and life.



    Much Love & Respect ♥

    Renee


  • swim.x
    October 1, 2008

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    Wow. This was such a hauntingly beautiful poem with amazingly vivid imagery. I love the title, by the way. It really reeled me in.
    Congratulations and good luck in the contest.
    Chin up,
    Swim.x


  • Wulf-Eyez De Winter gold member
    September 13, 2008
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    i love it