as I transitioned
from breathing in oxygen
to breathing out lies;
our airwaves collided,
and formed
crystallized frowns.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Set phrasers to STUN (This is a Contest.) by blind ecye dog.
850 points, ended October 17, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is absolutely stunning. I LOVE LOVE LOVE the metaphor's here, the breathing metaphor of telling lies with each breath. And then the phrase "crystalized frowns' is just great.
Unfortuntately, you are over the line limit. But I still really enjoyed reading this.
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thanks
damn thats too bad about the line limit..i was hoping a couple lines wont really matter
i'm still glad you liked it though
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beautiful :|
seriously, you're soooo freaking good.
it blows my minnnnd.
hate you
but really not. (:
<3
GOOD LUCK -
Seriously,
you better win.
I'm not just saying that because youre my friend,
but I've been reading other entries and I have to say this is THE best. Nothing will beat this.
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awwww thanks
<3
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