The spirits of all loved ones are there for you to see
Their souls are universal and fly forever free
The stars are silver atoms that gleam to show the way
Whilst lady moon is waiting to augour a new day.
Two generations soaring towards their given goal
A place of untold freedom, a healer of the soul
To watch them on their flight path, you look towards the sky
Then close your eyes to see them and watch as they fly by
Kaleidoscope emotions then burn within your heart
A power surge assists you as soul and body part
For time and space are moulded into an unknown sphere
You rush towards the heavens without a single fear.
Whilst reaching peace and wonder, true paradise arrives
Whilst riding new emotions you look upon past lives
All were a given purpose to reach this certain goal
Three generations flying who now become the whole.
Author notes
Option 22 " Old Artifacts " by JoAn Greinert
A contest entry
- JoAn Greinert - Intuitive Artist - Works of Art - Multiple Prompts Contest by Kazytc.
2400 points, ended September 17, 2008, 40 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congratulations on a pheomenal write!
Well done to you and congratulations on winning gold! A phenomenal write and fabulous penning, rich in vivid imagery and descriptives, well penned to rhyme and flow well too and a fabulous take on the prompt, no wonder this won you a Gold. Bravo! Well done write on!
Poetic Hugs & Thanks Millions for entering it was an honour to have you in our contest.
Please come back and enter my future contests ok!
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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Congratulations!!
Congratulations!! Brilliant! Deep, Intense, wonderful work, my word! Does my Old Artifact’s painting honourably! Congratulations and well deserved…….Thank you for being #1!
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Wonderful poem, the rhyme and flow are soft and flawless.... good luck in the contest
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a brilliantly written poem and the flow of this poem is incredible, well done
Kaleidoscope emotions then burn within your heart
A power surge assists you as soul and body part
For time and space are moulded into an unknown sphere
You rush towards the heavens without a single fear.
i love this verse it flows so well and adds to this brilliant poem. Brilliant.
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This is very cool...i like it.
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Beautiful
Really really pretty! I closed my eyes there for a moment. I love the flow but, of course that's a given. I read the poem first then looked at the picture. It was easy to see it all or maybe it would not have mattered. The imagery in this is just so incredibly vivid. ^_^
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Ah..this is really a universal concept bringing the depth in the poetry and its scenario showing the truths of life.....I love it..well done..and my thanks for sharing it ..
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Excellent
I really like the thoughts you've so ably expressed in this write. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Again, well done. -
Wow! You did a great job with this picture prompt. I really enjoyed your rhyme and the rhythm is great too. Love the message of everyone having a purpose. Beautiful and stunning write, and I wish you all the best in the contest. Blessings, Patty
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