I stopped for the pools of your eyes,
as you mine…
in silence, wonder;
I wish I had stayed forever…
Author notes
you can substitute 'lingered' for 'stayed', and some other more artful word for 'stopped' if you are a stylist; romantic writing calls for the primal and direct...
A contest entry
- Romance (20 words) by OurGoldenYears Page.
300 points, ended September 13, 2008, 27 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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lovely i like this alot it really did deserve the gold it got well done
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this was absolutely beautiful.
didnt know you had this in you lol
J.k
great job on taking the gold and all in
20 words
bravo
Love ya
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hey, thanks... yes, the locked eyes of bottomless pools, happened to me only a dozen times in my life... but alas, such happiness is not for me, I was destined to forever spar with calculating eyes of contention...!
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very nicely done...
well-deserving of Gold. Sweet, wistful, full of mystery...with so few words...
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toss-up between a half-dozen, I'll wager, thanks...
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I can hear
you say this, very nice rhythm, thank you for this entery,,,good luck
Linda
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