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all numb





I

collapse

into you,

until I am

gone too completely

and taste nothing simply

for the sake of tasting plain.

Your stare is constant and heavy,

raking me with a sweep of your eyes.

You spill into me and I come undone.








Author notes


An etheree.

Such a strange...numb.

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  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    You spill into me and I come undone.

    I love that line. It's got powerful meaning for me. Well done! Thanks for entering my contest. I’m honored that you would show your work here. Keep up the great work!


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    September 22, 2008
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    Beautiful. I can't explain this poem. I can feel it though.


  • Poesing
    September 22, 2008
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    This is really cool. I think I'll give it a try, too!
    Neat-o!


  • trekkergirl
    September 22, 2008
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    wow this is great!


  • azure85 gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    A very interesting etheree, with many meanings. Interesting author notes! Thank you so much.

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