Failure is how I feel
Lost between whats real
And the illusion I tell myself inside
When I withdraw and hide
Cut deep more inside then out
When really all I wanted to do was shout
Im not ok Im not just fine
But I feel like all I do is whine
I need you to see
I'm beggin for you to please help me
Lost inside myself somewhere deep
Standing at some cliff ready to take a leap
Wings broken can't hold me in flight
Life's shattered me I've giving up the fight
No hope left to hold on to
Reaching out one more time to you
Please don't let me drop my head
Or I may die when my head hits the bed
Visions take over whats left in my mind
When I think that life is really done this time
Author notes
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In a list
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt. by Angelflower.
600 points, ended October 3, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be kinder than necessary, for everyone you meet is fighting some kind of battle!
Comments
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Excellent flow of the rhyming verse and an honest and sincere portrayal of emotions---An abundance of imagery in its content--Congratulations on the award!
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Excellent
What a terrific write. So very well done. Congrats on the honorable mention.
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This was a really painful read, I had tears in my eyes.. Something so emotional and deep from just a picture.. This really amazed me, I'm shocked by it really.. thank you very much for sharing something so honest and heartfelt..
Angel
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Your emotions are laid upon this page, they can be felt with each & every word that is read. I've known these feelings many times, and yes I still go through them. maybe I don't share them like I used to, but they are still there. the sadness drips from the words. this is a very dark place that you are in, know this though.. you are not alone. when you think that there is no one there, just look around you and look close. there you will see someone who loves you not far away.
you did an excellent job with this prompt, you poured your heart & soul into this piece..
good luck
kat
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I've been worried and so concerned and this work speaks from your heart and mind so deeply. I continue to pray and uphold you. I wish I could make it all ok, but my friend, I'm sorry that is not within my power. You have had skills put before you, things learned while you were away, with T. and with other assistance that you choose not to partake. While you may not like how the other makes you feel, isn't this indeed much worse? Praying Praying Praying. F.R.O.G. ....
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A reflection of confusion and sadness... a unique take on the prompt but well written... there's a lot of emotion in your words and you've captured the lost feeling of the prompt wonderfully. Well done and all the best...
Ken
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This is very good michelle. You are so good at expressing your thoughts and feelings. Keep up the good work.
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