Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

The One

You.
The one that believes in me,
More then I do.
The sweet dream
That I hope will come true.

A contest entry

God Bless You!

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 6 of 6
  • kdom
    April 13

    Edit | Reply
    Short and sweet. I really like the tender expectations wrapped up in this. Good job.

    (then should be than)


  • offlimits
    September 15, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    sweet i like this
    well done


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 13, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Well done on this piece
    thanks for sharing.

    beautiful in content

    awww and indeed dreams do come true

    good luck


  • worshipchick
    September 13, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Aww, I love this. Short and sweet and to the point, that takes nothing away from its beauty. :-) One quick thing, since it's a comparison it would be "than" in line 3. Sorry, I'm a bit of a grammar freak. ;-) Great write!


  • charcoal
    September 13, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    sweetness


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    September 12, 2008
    Edit | Reply

    BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN

    AAAwwww,I do hope your dreams come true,thank you for this sweet entry and good luck
    Linda

1 - 6 of 6