Is this now my life,
is this how it ends?
Is this now my life
no time for amends?
With life over limb,
is this how it ends?
Survival seemed slim,
a choice to be made.
With life over limb,
small price to be paid -
disfigured but live.
A choice to be made,
I know I'll survive.
never again whole,
disfigured but live.
The ultimate toll,
never again whole.
Is this now my life?
Is this now my life?
A contest entry
- War Poems- Terzanelle Form #2 by kendhal22.
500 points, ended September 13, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Usually I'm not a big fan of the forms but this does have a very nice flow to it. Hmm... Now you might have me in the mood to try one!
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wow very poignant, I love the little short lines it fits the topic perfectly, and makes us consider life cut short, being stopped dead in our tracks, and a lovely kind of sequence to iy thanks for a really good read littlefishone
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Very well written
This is a very good poem. The lines are not forced and you followed the guidlines of a Terzanelle form. My fav. lines"I know I'll survive.
never again whole,
disfigured but live." It just speaks of conviction of someone lost someone in war. I want to thank you for coming to my contest, and give this wonderful piece of poetry written of conviction. Kendhal22
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