I'm drowning in darkness
that is holding me tight;
I've fallen and I'm scared
'cause I can't find the light.
At one time is was there;
it was as bright as the sun,
but I've lost it for now
from the things I have done.
Yet I don't seem to care
what is happening to me,
as long as I hide it
so others don't see.
And by keeping to myself,
my pain doesn't show,
and the bigger the smile,
the less people know.
For I don't want their sympathy,
that's not what I need;
what I need is to be replanted
just like that seed
that fell among thorns
and choked helplessly,
which is why there are times
that I yell desperately,
but my cries are then silent;
my air is choked out,
and no one can hear me
when I cry and I shout.
And I feel God is far
and that He's left me alone,
but I know it's my fault
and that I did it on my own.
For just like some others,
I pushed Him away;
and my heart is now aching
at the end of the day,
'cause I've let my past win
and my sins to come back;
I can feel Satan's hold
and his sly stealth attack,
for I shouldn't have done it,
it was stupid, I know,
'cause now I'm hiding my scars
in hopes they won't show.
And as I go on my way,
I will not leave a sign,
'cause to everyone else
I want to appear to be fine.
So in darkness' grasp
is where I will be,
for until I find light
I will never be free.
Author notes
I wrote this to try and get some more of my thoughts down on to paper because I have a hard time talking and/or thinking about them, but they just seem to make more sense to me when I write them out in a poem.
AP Name: Shadow Keeper
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wow... this is so well written. i love the emotion... my favourite part is
"And as I go on my way,
I will not leave a sign,
'cause to everyone else
I want to appear to be fine"
its hard to choose just one favourite part, but this part i can relate to so much... i love your poem, i love you ablity to write thoughts down so beautifully.... great job!! -
great emotion, just what Im looking for. and kudos for rhyming, i personally suck at it.
nicely done. -
Realy Sad
You can really feel the emotion throuw the writing -
I love the way you express yoursel
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Filled with emotion... a good write. The rhyming flows well. I liked how you said that you were like a seed, and that you had fallen upon thorns... I hope that you're okay. I've felt like this before too, but now I'm more optimistic than ever. Anyway, good write! shya
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i loved this write. great ryming. i can deeply relate to this. just hang in there. thanks for sharing.
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i am so sorry you feel this way . i have the same problems . i cant talk to people about how i feel its just that they dont understand me. so i write em down on my poems and wen they get to read them they understand. deep peice. i like it.
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this is a powerful piece its really good i am sorry you feel this way thankyou for posting i
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Thank you so much for sharing this. I'm sure there is a light somewhere, although difficult to see. I feel I could have written this poem, for it is me. "And I feel God is far, and that He's left me alone, but I know it's my fault, and I did it on my own". What passion, what power in those words. I feel them everyday. I'm so sorry we share these feelings and emotions. I wish you the best.
~miabella
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