You'll Be Taken Away

Could you try to explain

how you derive pleasure from inflicting so much pain.

Is it to show your strength or power

or do you just snap at a certain hour?

Shall we find something to blame?

The drink - the pressure

does it drive you insain?

I know inside you must have a soul

what you lack is self control.

So get a grip - start today

Because the next time you do it

you'll be taken away!

~ Sexy-Smiler ~

A contest entry

Open up and give me emotion by Velvet Rose Petals. 1150 points, ended September 21, 2008, 53 entries
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Velvet Rose Petals
September 21, 2008
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i forgot to add more hbs in so ill be sending in more points or something.. idk if i can change it now.. but i will for sure send some points over..
Velvet Rose Petals
September 20, 2008

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I LOVE IT! haha the rhyme is really neat in this poem. I also like the chunky format you used.. very clever indeed!! Bravo
Rose
Bob Fox
September 19, 2008

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I wonder
What is it we wish to really achieve when we inflict pain on another. I know in my younger days it did give me a release but damn was I ever stupid.
My Souls Reflection
September 13, 2008

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Lots of questions...trying to understanding...then a very powerful ending. Wow! Full of emotion here my friend. Best of luck in the contest.