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Mollasses Effect

If only you'd see
the coming dismay,
the mollasses effect
of unblessed love;
the sweet and slow-pouring
outrageous attempts to
be righteous before
the generations, knowing
that no kind of love
is worth  plucking out
the holy watchers,
the eyes of children.


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  • Siddhartha
    September 16, 2008
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    Very good!

    I liked the cautionary tone.


  • FransB gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    I saw this title

    a day or two ago, then could not get round to it, but it lingered in the mind, and now I am back here again. I so enjoy concepts such as 'mollasses-effect', it gives a dynamics that would be cause to much pondering and discussion. The 'contrasting' of this with 'the eyes of children' is magnificently down, and hightens the effect portrayed in this poem. I am glad I got time to come back to read your poem. Be blessed. Frans


  • suseann
    September 12, 2008

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    This piece is profound verse on many levels of expressing "that part of ugly,that sticks", in the forming of blank slate innocence. Long winded sentence,sorry. But it's all relevent,as is this powerful piece of sound compassionate advice in poet's sanguine ink.