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Childish Paintings

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There was once a part of me
(somewhere beneath my passion;
and the purple satin sheets
where we made love
and beside our childish paintings
that we rendered as our future)
that hoped I wouldn’t fall
in love with you. Not this much.
Just in case fate cast it’s hands
downward, nipped our edges
and drew us apart.

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Option # 17:

Image:
"Char"
By JoAn Greinert

Recently I've been writing about human emotions and thoughts. That's why I've tied what I personally saw in the image with human relation.
I find it amazing the naivety love can bring to anyone, no matter what age.

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  • Kazytc gold member
    September 18, 2008

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    Wow very soul searchingly deep indeed!

    Wow you have an incredible capacity to feel with such phenomenal depth beyond even the core of your very being, soul and consciousness, looking ahead with caution a credit to your wisdom and stability.
    You have brought depth and soul to this painting and a great take on this painting too, wow brilliant work here and loved all you wrote from start to finish, amazing work write on, love it, bravo! Never stop writing it will take you on an incredible journey you have ahead of you for sure.
    Thanks Millions for entering it was an honour to have you in our contest.
    Please come back and enter my future contests ok!
    Poetic Hugs & Thanks Millions!
    Kaz.
    Kazytc xx


  • UniversalVoice
    September 17, 2008

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    Very touching.

    Very touching. Render to surrender and do not be afraid of the outcome. Enjoyed reading! Thank you


  • Kram
    September 14, 2008
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    lovely

    its lovely and tenderly expressed , reading it feels like a feather touch


  • xPlatinum-Lotusx
    September 12, 2008

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    This should definitely place in this contest. This is a wonderful piece and I wish you the best of luck. You definitely did a good job working the human relation into this piece. Very well written and expressed. Like the words jump out and grab you. I love how you used the word fate in this piece. Very powerful and seemingly emotionally driven write.
    Wonderful! Definitely a candidate for gold if it were my contest. Well done!!!!


  • TabbyJoy
    September 12, 2008

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    Oh...this is gold, sweetheart. Such a sharp reminder to all of us of the frailty of love...of the fear we all suppress that our happiness could be shattered. It's both wonderful and scary when someone breaks down the walls we've built to protect our hearts.

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