Left here,
discarded.
Abandoned,
brokenhearted.
Twisted up,
unwrapped, untied,
Like a toy you destroy
and leave outside,
The day after it seemed
such a pretty prize.
Author notes
29 words
A contest entry
- Trying Hard Not To Fall or ... Love is Falling apart by piccola.
600 points, ended September 19, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Is there a name for this kind of rhyme? I know about internal and slant, end line of course. Let me know because rule #5 says the poem must rhyme.
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Sorry to my knowledge no name for this rhyme just wrote as it came, but it does rhyme isn't that end line, like b,b,c,c,c, sorry again, it is a mess.
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'Like a toy you destroy'. Now that's something to think about, this entire poem, all be it short, is spoken of the hardships of falling in love and being broken hearted. I wish you luck in this contest, but I think you'll do very well.
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a brilliant take on the promt with very deep imagery we all have moments in lifes journey like this good luck in the contest
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Like a toy you destroy
and leave outside,
The day after it seemed
such a pretty prize.
What a sad sort of thought. Yes, I think we must have all felt that at one time or another. You certainly expressed it perfectly.
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