He must be a stranger in my world,
as we are not in the same way.
Freely floating in the sky,
he is a cloud;
Quietly leaving the heavens,
I am a raindrop.
Piercing the peaceful shade,
he is a ray of sunlight;
Waiting to infinitely vanish,
I am a drop of dew.
Amazing voices break the murk,
he is the source of melody;
Wandering lonely in the silence,
I am a mixture of agony.
I will always gaze admiringly,
but never will he know.
As we march off towards opposite directions,
he is my most familiar stranger.
Author notes
Please leave a commet if I made any mistakes in grammar. Thank you!=D
I'd like to express my gratitude to Shya.Without her help, this one would never be good. Thanks very much! Also, the one who gave me the inspiration to complete it.
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There is a somber and most melancholy feel to these words. It is as if, you allowed a moment to pass that should have never passed. I agree with the rest...the last lines are powerful. Thank you so much for this entry in my contest. Please forgive my delay in commenting.
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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I love the last line of this poem and the way you explained how much of the opposite you portray in him. You definitely portrayed what it's like to be the secret admirer. I love it. :]
"Amazing voices break the murk,
he is the source of melody;
Wandering lonely in the silence,
I am a mixture of agony.
I will always gaze admiringly,
but never will he know.
As we march off towards opposite directions,
he is my most familiar stranger."
Great last stanzas. Thanks so much for entering. :]
Peace
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Thank you for entering this beautifully expressed piece.
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This fits perfectly!
My most familiar stranger - it is absolutely perfect. Sometimes, things that are not the same, work perfectly together as well. Almost opposites need each other sometimes. Like.. light and dark. You can't have just one!You need both ^_^ Thank you so much for your lovely entry. -
Thank you to you all!
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wow i really like what you have written here, it is different from the other entries in this contest but it works so well, it's so powerful, and paints such a vivid picture, best of luck
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This is a beautifully, sad poem. Great job, and thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty
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Thank you very much!
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Thank you for your entry & good luck!
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I love your last line, there is a great balance here. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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