One gets up happy every morning,
Eats and drinks till they are done.
The other wakes to only emptiness,
Another day of loneliness has begun.
One gets hugs and kisses all day,
Sings and plays with total joy.
The other is hit and cursed at,
So hated like a used up toy.
One goes to school ever so clean,
Does their work and gets good grades.
The other wares wrinkled old rags,
With hair that is missing its braids.
One gets in trouble for doing wrong,
Is punished yet knows their loved.
The other has spilled their milk,
They are beaten, pushed and shoved.
One sees hope in all of mankind,
No challenge they fear to face.
The other has lost their trust,
Because of love they see no trace.
One wakes up each and every day,
Wondering what great things are ahead.
The other goes through life thinking,
Is this the day I’ll end up dead?
Author notes
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A contest entry
- ABUSE - looking for poems to be published :) by DramaQueen469.
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OMG. this is so amazing. I really loved this poem and the way it flowed. Has a wonderful rhyme and such a sad story behind it. Great work. This is has wowed me so very much. I give you a 25. I have yet to give anyone a perfect score on their one poem or many poems. you are the first. Congrats on that. You have a total of 93 points. You've made the finalist list. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you. Kahy
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Bravo!
Do you realize you could write as an advocate, this is so true and heart breaking when a child is subjected to that cruelity that way, in darkness and no love. Wonderful write for sure worthy of the silver. Blessings.
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a very sad poem you have here i hope this isnt about the children you babysit i hate people who abuse anyone i was abused in so many way and i hate myself for it so i tend to abuse myself thanks for sharing this poem you are a great poet and a great dad i love you daddy
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Amazing poem,
Perfect rhyme and good flow
This was real sad..and I almost cried at the end.
Thanks for entering and good luck.
Tash.
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wow. an impactful poem
"One sees hope in all of mankind,
No challenge they fear to face.
The other has lost their trust,
Because of love they see no trace."
totally different worlds, and it shows.
"The other goes through life thinking,
Is this the day I’ll end up dead?"
heart-wrenching and it certainly provides food for thought.
thanks and have a blessed new year
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Oh my heart breaks
So true are your words and it infuriates me that those children lost the teachers are often as mean as the children at times .Why cant the schools teach the children compassion and bring used clothing and help them feel as pretty and loved and show the children its not the childs fault they live the way they do but at school they can feel love it would ake all the difference in the world it would be the only safe place for them to get away from the horror .Yet today so often they are taunted and others break their hearts even at school which is also a form of abuse when will it ever stop -
Wow, how horrible (the tale, not the poetry lol). You almost had me in tears, how sad that this is a true situation. Thankyou so much for entering, and WELL DONE
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Such a sad yet true write
I have never understood how kids with so much could walk by and not help those without anything . How can they laugh at them and call them names when they cant help how their life is at home .Its a must we all make those children feel loved at school if no where else to give them a safe haven for a place to rest their heads .If we refuse to understand and are to blind to see then
all the goodness in the world wont be able to save me . Help those children in need share what you have and give them purpose in this world for they have no one else to talk to be the one to show them love and peace a small cornor in their life where they can truly find happiness
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Wow, you have really captured something in this piece.
Why can't we humans see these things and rectify them, so that the children can stop suffering? I often see abuses on the public streets...not the worst end, but enough to make me wonder what goes on behind closed doors...this to me is madness lol
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Thank you, I don't know why people want to do this to children. We never see the worst of it in public.
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110 out of 10
This poem is heart breaking, but extremely well written. Your contrast was excellent! Every child needs to know they are loved by someone. Thank you so much for entering my contest! -
Oh so sad and yet so true why must it always be the children that suffers the most a touching write
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The children always seem to be left out.
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An enjoyable piece...
An enjoyable piece; unfortunately, I've seen at least one real-life instance of this sad occurrence; an excellent expression of an overlooked problem of poor parenting; nice job! --Joe
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Thank you glad you liked it. To bad that any child would have to go through this or anything like it. Until some realize the treasure they have I guess it is moot.
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Excellent write
This is a beautifully written piece I love good rhyming poetry and this one is realy good and the flow was so smooth.
The oposites in each paragraph just perfectly written.
A very heart touching poem. And it certainly shows what just a little love can do. and the results when just a little love is absent.
This is a winner in my book. Good Luck in the contest
And God Bless
ED.
Suggestion in your title shouldn't [ " to " be "two" ]
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Thank you much, and thanks for the tip on the title. Sometimes I type to fast.
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and the cycle continues that is why a simple gesture of love to others is so needed in the world,
compassion is yours my friend
exceptional rhyme
God bless...
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Tha nk you, each of us can make a big difference with just a small effort.
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