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Breaking Waves Mull : Option 14

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Look around as the world

sings a symphony,

re-creating memories

of laughter captured

in precious moments.

 

Voices raised by the passion of different views

oils mix and the first stroke is made.

 

Tears fall from the open air only to splash

into a ripple made by a wandering finger

creating fiction with paste.

 

Contorting fall into depths of  spring

euphony sings in harmony with Angels

divinity.

                     

Emotions rawr for the injustice of going  

unnoticed, while love rolls into hearts

that were stolen by a sand shaped kiss.

 

Softly stroking the strings of a painters guitar

sensuality released through the Angels sigh

while beyond the viewers eyes, every curve

like a womans body, crafted tenderly.

 

                                                                         

Painting our tomorrows with our emotions

of today, we sway in the rhythm of the waves

as they cradle our dreams in their watery

embrace.

 

As the oceans exhales vibrations from the

guitar cease..

 

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OPTION 14
Breaking Waves Mull
By Tom Barron




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  • hawkeslake gold member
    October 4, 2008

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    Amazing!

    Simply wonderfully visual as well as textual. I'm never sure if poets intend poems to be read more than one way, but this one can also be read column by column, as nearly abtract, and the wave effect of reading from column TO column is intense. My first day on this website, and I am filled with joy!


  • stavykm gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    Just Excellent

    Wow you did do a beautiful job on this poem. The imagery and the flow of your poem went ever so well with the painting. Yes I think the ocean at times is like a symphony myself. I love how you captured
    emtions with the beautiful sounds again of mother nature on this seascape painting. So beautifully penned. Congradualtions making it to the finalists and hoping you win the gold.
    Wishing You Many Blessings
    Much Love
    Kelle Marie


  • Kazytc
    September 13, 2008

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    Wow Sis this is breathtaking!

    This is fantastic what a beautiful and phenomenal poem of great artistry and poetic graphics.

    Love this bit...

    Painting our tomorrows with our emotions
    of today, we sway in the rhythm of the waves
    as they cradle our dreams in their watery
    embrace.
    As the oceans exhales vibrations from the
    guitar cease..

    In fact all of the poem is phenomenal and such beautiful descriptives used they sing into your mind and make all manner of fabulous visions and music in there, wow you could be a songwriter too and I hope you are in print you are just phenomenal, this is truly beautiful moving and incredibly awesome, wow I am awe of your talent you are fantastic!

    Poetic Hugs & Best of Luck in the contest and hope you win gold in every contest you enter you well deserve to!
    Bravo, you have excelled with this!
    Kaz.
    Kazytc xx

    Proud to be your AP Sis!
    So phenomenal is this!


  • crazyfoolartist
    September 13, 2008
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    Emotional and flowing, really beautiful work, thank you !!
    Best wishes
    Tom


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    You have given great life to such a beautiful picture. You caressed each stroke and gave it a story of its own. Best to you in the contest


  • maralisa silver member
    September 13, 2008

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    wow a beautiful take on the promt the imagery of the artist waves you have painted is outstanding good luck in the contest


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 13, 2008

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    I love the mix of music and art in this sis! Perfect flow and just a lovely write!


  • In Too Deep1
    September 12, 2008

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    This is a really beautiful , soft and flowing writ. I loved the emotion and calm of reality that is knitted in each stanza. Antiquities are personal leaflets that lack color when there is no emotion poured upon them. They are sentiments of history that number imagination. Inanimate animations that only dance in the eyes of the beholder.. Subtle trinkets, keepsakes visible only to a heart that cares. This is a superb writ, and a most enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes in the comp


  • Riamh
    September 12, 2008

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    A brilliant and inspired write, Angel. Well done. *hugs*

    Slayer


  • poppa
    September 12, 2008

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    If I'd have known you chose the same picture , I would have chosen a different one !! beautiful write fulled with emotion and touching imagery... truly loved it ..good luck in the contest, competitor


  • Cannonsfire
    September 12, 2008

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    So pretty sissy, just makes you feel like you float on the top of waves. C (pssst 'precious' )

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