I had to look twice,
sitting next to me,
was me and me.
The one on the left,
all in white,
and on the right,
she gave me a fright.
I am no angel I know,
look at me sitting here,
naked from head to toe.
May be it was a sign,
to change my ways,
at least I think,
the me on the left,
was trying to say.
Her on the right,
she is the old me,
always darkly dressed,
full of misery.
Never a nice word to say,
she hurt too many people,
in different ways.
The me in white,
is who I will now be,
smiling and how,different,
I will be,
wait and see.
We all have different sides
to us,
some people are quick to judge.
I have found out,
who I am,
and what I want to be,
thanks to my better side,
there is now a new me.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired by MessedupMarionette.
700 points, ended October 10, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Two sides to all of us...the good trying to our weigh the bad...so many thoughts so many reasons and yet only one can win...very interesting read and words to ponder thank you for sharing with me...
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Thank you for reading and your comments.Carl.
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This is an interesting piece. The idea behind it is really good, but I think you use the word "Me" too much--it seems like it kind of alienates the reader. But the emotion behind it is really interesting. Thanks for entering.
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Thanks for your comments,Carl.
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Wow Carl! That was great! "Thanks to my better side, there is now a new me". Great ending!
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Glad you like it, thankyou.
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Nicely done. Duality is always a good subject. You were clear with vivid imagry. I liked the last two lines. It was inspiring and hopeful. Good luck. You should do well. Return the favor?
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Thank you ,Carl.
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