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Teardrops On My Guitar

Lured into foliage
of your sugar coated promises
and dandelion kisses
my broken lips misinterpreted your phrase;

till death do us part

I cling to the words that melted
gliding down from your poisonous lips
coveted the kiss of your serpent's tongue
and sacrificed myself like a butterfly
crucified on a cardboard cross

And now

as I watch you stumbling through the door
my heart breathlessly whispered Adieu
for entwined around the words you had woven
will be my solitary gallows
where poetic velvet tears of sadness
echoed by my miss matched heart

Endless anguish consumed my soul
planting seeds of vacancy within every sigh
and from the ruins of my desolate soul
it whispers crescendos sentiments
while my summoned thoughts is drowning
in pools of pain and contempt
being mocked by purple moon

Remnants of the tree outside
cries dead leaves at my door
were now in somber mood
swaying in tune of Winter tears
they have blown away, withered and gone
forgotten like yesterday's promises
while full-moon is turning on my back

My illusions that you would never leave me turned cold
and forever winter nights running across my veins
colors subdued by grey,
its brush-strokes mingled with your lies

What I hear now are the songs of regrets
and loneliness ringing endlessly
your abrupt farewell was such a lonely hymn
both tragic and bittersweet
skimming like swallows past my heart

You became the best definition of my hallucination-
your once familiar skin is now a horrid taste
giving pain to my tongue
along with the stone fruits of illusion
weeping beneath a portrait of frozen tears
dispensing your poignant promises

Violet rivers framed my bruised heart
sinking in a graveyard of sorrow
pretending to paint pink clouds from the gloomy sky
fashioning new afterthoughts over shadowy dreams
coaxing forth with a ballad of hope
that someday the summer sun will shine again
through my cloudy eyes

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Comments

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  • justgot2loveme
    December 8, 2008

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    This was such a nice poem.
    I fell in love with the title.
    Great writing.
    Thnaks for sharing and good luck.

    Justgot2loveme


  • BleedingBlackTears
    December 3, 2008
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    well done wonderful write i enjoyed it thoughroughly


  • Ryno
    November 30, 2008
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    I really did not like the title. It made me not want to click the link to read this poem. So, you can imagine how surprised I was when I found this treat. The emotions in here a very powerful, you have a lot of strong phrasing, and both literal strong imagery and the abstract imagery.

    I really liked this. Thanks for the entry.


  • Floorboards
    November 13, 2008

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    Beatifully poetic.

    My scores are,

    Imagery; 9
    Metaphor; 9
    Style; 9

    Total. 27. Great score.


  • Ftw lol
    October 29, 2008
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    COOLNESS

    its really nice. Lots of big words though X_X jk jk jk its really sad but nice I love it ^_^


  • Overcast
    October 25, 2008
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    Lovely imagery and metaphors


  • petalblue2
    October 18, 2008

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    Watching you stumbling through the door
    my heart breathlessly whispered Adieu
    poetic velvet tears of sadness
    echoed by my miss matched heart

    Oh this poem is lovely. Every stanza emotionally heart-wrenching. The metaphors are exquisitely done! What a journey through the senses you have created for your readers!


  • sensualbutterfly
    October 17, 2008

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    Every word of this piece hit home with me. It is a wonderfully sad yet heartfelt write! Thank you so much for sharing


  • Nicada silver member
    October 8, 2008

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    This is a beautifully sad write that is written very well. Nice flow to this poem and so full of some very deep and strong emotions. Nice job, and thanks so much for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty


  • SchizoChic
    October 3, 2008

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    You did an excellent job with word usage here and this just flows so well. I loved this piece. Best of luck to you in the contest.


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 1, 2008

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    Thank you for your deeply heartfelt entry, good luck in my contest, Josie

  • Felixthecat7
    September 26, 2008
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    Pretty Good...


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 17, 2008

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    Such deep and powerfully sad emotions running through this. I think most will have been here at one time or another, I know I have. Superbly penned, good luck


  • Ethereal One gold member
    September 12, 2008

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    excellent expression

    Your words express such a deep sadness, and hurt. It is such a huge disappointment when we believe the love is "forever", and we find out the other person did not feel that way.

    Good luck in the contest! This is a beautiful and tender expression you have written for it.

    Jeannette


  • Malabu
    September 12, 2008

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    w0w! tatts i held my brearh till i could reach the end ... then sighed to your guitar strings...
    love the poem little lotus flower
    mal


  • mysticstorm gold member
    September 12, 2008

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    This is beautiful and so tender...I love the feel and flow...very emotional in lovely metaphor and truth...I truly remember these feelings well and that is sad...
    Deep lovely work, which you do so well...Thank you for the compliment and I would love to be your mother or sister...my daughter Lexie is 29...
    Love to you!
    mystic

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