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Castles of Time ...Hills over Loch Lomond(Option 6)

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                 As a fortress the hills  stand above

             valleys and mountains in a hardy land

              where blizzards blow harsh on cragged

                peaks giving home to humble

                                  mountain sheep.

 

 

                  Far above the towering pine

               climbers scale like backs on a spine

                  these carved out monuments

                       of ancient time.

 

 

                 Seasons may come and go

               as heathers blooms let us know

              the beauty of this land to show

               midst rugged harshness and

                 fierce winds blow

 

 

                 A warmth and loving presence

                of those who dwell here remains

           As pipes play and the hills sing the refrain

                     of the people of this

                       ancient land.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

"Hills over Loch Lommond" oil painting 

                      by Tom Barron

300mm x 300mm 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

                  

 

 

                 

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Forefathers land I have learned to respect and love...and the land....a beauty all it's own...Respectfully written. (Option 6)

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  • Yesss...good old Loch Lomond...Love it. This poem feels so tranquil and just...pristine. No useless fluff, just substance that allows the ideas and the overall representation to come through to the reader unfettered. This isn't the type of poetry I usually read, but I actually really enjoyed it, and it was refreshing to me. Definitely one that I enjoyed tremendously.

  • jadeangyal
    December 3, 2008

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    "where blizzards blow harsh on cragged peaks giving home to humble mountain sheep." Great contrast in these lines! The overpowering peaks, and the mild sheep!
    "like backs on a spine"--this simile seemed a little odd to me. I like the spine image, though. What could be more clear--like vertebrae on a spine, like fingers up a spine--? I know these are no good, I'm just brainstorming.
    " these carved out monuments
    of ancient time."
    Now this was a beautiful line. And a very lovely poem overall, too.


  • Kazytc
    September 14, 2008
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    Lovely presentation!

    Love the presentation here, it sneat, uncluttered and it sets off the beautiful poem and its fabulous sentiments herein. Grea poetic graphics too and so well rhymed and flowing. Lovely essence and ambiance as well. Wow its lovely and breathtaking, well done, love it, bravo!
    Poetic Hugs & Thanks for entering our contest and best of luck to you too!
    Kaz.
    Kazytc xx


  • nilav
    September 14, 2008
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    re-painting the whole painting with powerful words is really appreciable....enjoyed it

  • cokacolacowpok
    September 14, 2008

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    This is lovely my friend. You penned this write with such depth and emotion. We should all respect the land from our forefathers.
    Brian


  • crazyfoolartist
    September 13, 2008

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    Very atmospheric, earthy and I think you may even have been to Scotland - you seem to know it !
    I really like your poem, many, many thanks !!
    With best wishes
    Tom


  • storiesuntold gold member
    September 13, 2008
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    Beautiful

    Yes I to have respect for the land and all within it of nature


  • poetrandy
    September 12, 2008
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    Beautiful, beautiful place, beautiful painting!

    Rose, this rhymed poem is very good! I remember visiting the Loch several years ago. Your images are wonderful and stimulating! The poetic descriptions of yours match the painting and place so well! First class poetry, Rose! This should be a winner! Good luck in the contest!

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