I wake up in the morning and I think I'm 25.
I am so glad I chain smoke and don't exercise.
It really sweetens the deal when I take that first gaze.
As I regain composure, I dim the lights and back up.
I start to look a little better.
The morning puffiness seems to hide the deep creases.
I decide if it is a coffee day or a vodka day.
As I reach for the vodka I remember I have to work today.
Oh well, coffee it is.
I put on "Lou Reed's" "Lisa Says" and dance around.
I go to the closet and put on my bright red dress.
It is going to be a good day.
I get in my car and start the "rat race".
It is what it is.
I'm alive,healthy, and strong.
Author notes
Life at 47
A contest entry
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Great work on making the mundane and ordinary seem poetic. Thank you for entering and best of luck. Happy New Year as well!
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im not quite 25 yet, and 20 is too young to start chain smoking, but i do it anyways. oh well, we all have our vices.
L1 S3 i think it would read better if you put i have to decide if it is a coffee day or vodka day, rather than i decide if it is a coffee day or a vodka day. it makes the sentence seem haphazard without the word have.
i like the last line, it reaffirms the good in life while trying to make it through the 'rat rac' of everyday life. -
nicely written poem. I like it. this says it is you who sets the tone for your day. You can choose to have a good day... or a bad one. It's a choice. Good write. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for placing it in our friends reading list.
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Superb
Ah, I still drink coffee, most every morning, yet, thank goodness, I'm retired, and out of the "rat race". You express yourself quite well. Thanks for sharing. -
we all take what we can get and I think except for the morning vodka ... it is a good day
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Welcome to the group btw, I like these humorous poems we are a somber group, but I can see you will liven us up. With this one the only thing was the first two lines actually rhymed and I was set for a funny, lilting start and there was no more rhyme. Can sympathize with the sentiments too, I think I'm 25 sometimes, but my mind and body haven't communicated for years and the body just isn't getting the message. (Bad attempt at humor.) I'm going to bed now.
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This one made me laugh. It's full of happy contradictions and sarcasm and I loved it! Nice flow, and great imagery. Very nice! Thanks for entering!
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life at 47,oh bless lol, i really like this, and im sure any woman can relate to this poem, i love how your sence of humor comes through on your writes too
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Very REAL, and that is refreshing
I especially like the last line. "I'm alive, healthy and strong." It really makes you think of what really matters in life...living
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Well thought out
Such truth you write here, makes the reader question their own existence. We all do each day, live and learn, go to work, fight emotional fires in our heads, enter into the rat race and hope to come out alive at the other end. At the end of the day, to be alive, healthy and strong is all that matters. Great write
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I agree with the others, I love your write, how it made me smile at the thoughts you put into this..
--sorry too, if i can't explain how I enjoyed reading this, cause I am no critic at all---
Keep writing!
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I really enjoyed reading this. =] I don't have the time to leave a more detailed comment im afraid, but when i have more constant computer access I'll comment again =]
thank you for entering,
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enkeli -
Such modern yet complex themes you portrayed here. I really enjoeyd reading it. It thoroughly describes how people's lives are today. I hope all's well
Congratulations and good luck in the contest,
Chin up,
Swim.x
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Great , crazy!
Great, crazy, creative, inspired! WOW! What a write -- I hope this isn't true about you? Very inspired poetry, well written great subject, charming, fun . . . It's top notch stuff -- I like it! It's a winner!
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This brought a smile to my face,loved the line coffee or vodka day lol, good luck.
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