The pale moon light shinning down on her
Shadows dance around the lake side
As she sits there all alone
Her hair brushing along her ice cold face
She listens to the sounds of the night
With blood stained hands
And horror filled dreams
She calls for you
She longs for you
Will you come to her?
Drawn to her mysterious song
A lullaby of death
'Hush my sweet child'
She whispers
'Soon we will be together again.
Come to me my sweet child,
Lay down and rest your head'
A cold wind rushes over his body
As his mind is taken control of
She guides him with a menacing silence
As they make their way to the water
Gliding across the lake to the deepest and darkest of water
The lake seems to come alive
At the feel of the warmth of his body
The weeds wrap themselves around him
Bringing him down to a watery grave
His eyes flutter open
He tries to scream
Her face looms in-front
as the last of his breathe runs out
His body bleeding into the lake
Its waves with streaks of red kiss the sandy shore
As the rising sun set the sky alight
With the brilliant colours of fire
His body finds its way to shore
Drained of all life
And the girl from his dreams peers out the window
At the beauty she created
She sits on her window sill
Just watching silently for hours
Her thirst for dread humbled for now
Until another year passes
A contest entry
- Halloween Warm-up by Tom The Invader.
450 points, ended September 12, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite-palooza by swim.x.
1650 points, ended October 6, 2008, 100 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Ghosts, Ghouls and Spooky Tales - Ages 13 to 17 by The Fun House.
400 points, ended November 18, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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What a wonderful dark and scarey write. You have written it well and the imagery is vivid and scarey. well done. Thankyou for entering into the halloween contest. this was great.
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Such vivid and wonderful imagery. I truly love your fantasy way of writing. It was so beautiful. Aww. There's water in my eyes
In a good way!
Congratulations and good luck in the contest.
Chin up,
Swim.x
'With blood stained hands
And horror filled dreams' -
ooohh scary! great story and description combined with a strong rhythm. I really enjoyed reading this.
Great work
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In the fourth stanza,line four, 'there' should be 'their' to show possesion. This is rather creepy. Well done.
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