i lean into autumn, resolute
to gather the grain
planted in a spring
long exhaled
to bake the loaves
and break the bread
drink from the cup
time does not stand still
because the hourglass lays prone
Author notes
prompt:target
In a list
A contest entry
- Collage by Cat.
3500 points, ended October 4, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Autumn is my favorite season, the time I feel most at ease. I am wild in the summer and slutty in the spring and winter is just too damned cold. I like the reflection here. Perfect for the harvest.
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thanks, i love autumn, too, but winter is my season. I have a thing for trees without their leaves, every twist and turn of branch and twig is revealed. odd, i guess.
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Not odd. I think Winter is the most beautiful month, but I am a vegetarian and get way too cold. Your fondness for winter actually makes sense. Wise with white wisdom like your poetry.
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i'm leaning in to autumn too, i really like this
the final image is a strong one
very good entry here
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thanks
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Show off...
I love all of this. Nicely written.
♥Becky♥
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Target?
lucy you have some splainin' to do...
i love the feel of this piece
the time marching forward and the preparedness with that you've sown? sewn? .. sewn? sewn? jesus h christ.. which ever spelling you like best
at any rate- the final stanza is your clincher- love the idea of the target.. wait no.. the hourglass prone and time still moving forward.. helluva strong image
if this were mine i would eliminate the's ..
really good piece.
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Thanks
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drink from the cup....
I loved that - the placement is perfect and i am lost in my own world of metaphores in that space.
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thanks
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A good write and a good read--thought provoking.
FLows very well.
If I may ask: your picture, you look so stern almost sad--why is that? Again if I may ask.
bw
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thanks,
8 yrs of bush/cheney...
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LOLOLOL!!
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an interesting use of the prompt
love your statement about time.. so true
i felt the breeze even
nicely done!
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The time of harvest for all our labor is upon us. This poem makes me know. It is confirmation for me. This is our Season.
Thank you dear poet for these words of wisdom. This message forges me into this new day. The last line made me sit in awe. I can easily see the "prone hour glass". It makes me want to erase procrastination from my life.
Exceptional!
I wish you well in this challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Wise and beautiful
Absolutely perfect...every solitary word is true poetic mastery. Talent is your wind my friend!
Lovely!!!
wolf
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Yes, autumn as a time of repletion, fruitfulness, time to bake and break the bread. Love the cup. Fine imagery.
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"i lean into autumn, resolute"
Gorgeous use of language & imagery, my Friend...& your piece echos what I've always maintained; that autumn is a time for harvest...
so many people try to convince me it's a time of death & sadness.
Au contraire.
Good luck in Mary's contest, Sweetie.
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