The temptation is to great
I have given up and gone into the dark
I look around
death is looking at me
I take a deep breath
cold bitter air greets me
I look death in the eyes
i see a girl
she on her bed crying
as she crys she reaches under her bed
she pulls out a razor
slowly she puts it to her wrist
a second gose by
she pulls
a scarlet line
it aperres were the razor had just been
she looks down
stops crying
then again
she pulls the razor
another line
after a moment I realize
this girl is
me
in an instant I'm back in my room
two scarlet lines
cold tear stains on the bed.
A contest entry
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450 points, ended October 16, 2008, 34 entries
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nice
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i really like your poem.
its amazing.
and sad.
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thanks
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i can feel the pain and emotion in here, luv the ending and the way you begin it, awshum write
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yup i so know what u mean and i wish i could punch them in the face but i cant cuz im on probation cuz i got expelled for being to vilent at school last year so if i get in a nother fight im going to be expelled again
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thank u that really helps me cuz if had some ppl at school who hate my poem and call me emo and everything and its like if u dontlike just say i dident really like not like lable me for life u know? well thanks again
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your welcome, and psh labels are for soup cans, people who dont understand poetry and have to label you really dont know much,just ignore them or punch em' in the face
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So sad and touching here, the pain once again, how you cut because it releases the hurt inside, many people can relate to this too a lot, the pictures goes really well too...
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thanxs love ur poem Her immortality its really good
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Your welcome and thank you!
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