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Autumn Shoreline ( HM )

Coolness of the day

seasons turning tide,

falls silent the still.

Gently she nestle's ..

upon fine mustard tone; grains,

untouched not a footprint left in the sand.

 

Faint haze of sunlight,

peers through achromatic skies

casting reflection in mirrored waters

 

Beyond imagery,

the salty taste in air,

whispering thoughts

 

for these Highlands are.. .

 

Hauntingly beautiful,

rugged in rural splendour,

Glens held the secret,

as blankets of Heather,

spray autumn's colour

'against the backdrop of bracken'.

 

to the season now turning,

as I walk away..

 

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Autumn Shoreline
ByTom Barron

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  • headintheclouds
    November 4, 2008

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    Coolness of the day
    seasons turning tide,
    turning tide is a nice metaphore or phrase it is beautiful!
    falls silent the still.
    Gently she nestle's ..
    upon fine mustard tone; grains,
    mustard tone lol!!!
    untouched not a footprint left in the sand.
    Faint haze of sunlight,
    peers through achromatic skies
    what does achromatic mean???
    casting reflection in mirrored waters
    this line really jumps out at me it is my very favourite line!
    Beyond imagery,
    the salty taste in air,
    yum yum yum
    whispering thoughts
    that is a nice metaphore...
    overall good write thanks for entering a fun poem to read...


  • trekkergirl
    September 20, 2008

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    wow I can see how this one got a trophy it is excellent. Great job good imagery here and an excellent read.


  • Abe 1
    September 15, 2008

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    true ya an artist in words
    really took me to the isles of scotland
    hope this poem goes all de way
    cheers abe


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    Wow; this was truly a beauty sis!
    I can see you put so much thought and
    effort into this write, with all
    your brilliant metaphors and imagery.

    Amazing piece.
    Best of luck in the contest


  • crazyfoolartist
    September 14, 2008

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    Hi, I just sold this painting today in my gallery, the buyers were from New York and were absolutely amazed and thrilled when I showed them your poem online !!
    Well done and thanks again.
    Best wishes
    Tom


  • Age of Rain
    September 13, 2008

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    Your first three lines are GORGEOUS!

    'mustard tone grains,'

    a lovely image, i just thought slight rearrangement of punctuation would improve this. 'mustard tone; grains' My thoughts, not necessarily accurate ones.

    'against the backdrop of bracken.'

    beautiful!

    This is a lovely piece!


  • gullionmar
    September 12, 2008
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    nice

    how ture of autumn what a lovely write you have penned here good luck in contest


  • Kazytc
    September 12, 2008

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    Wow how lovely!

    This is poetry personified and penned to perfection from the painting which you so eloquently bring to life here, love the ambiance and the weaving its fantastic well done lovely, love it! Write on!
    Poetic Hugs & Thanks Millions for the honour of your entry and for entering and best of luck to you!
    Poetic Hugs & Thanks Millions,
    Kaz.
    Kazytc xx

  • crazyfoolartist
    September 12, 2008
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    Very beautiful and atmospheric, just like you walked on that shore.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 12, 2008

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    Wow, stunning imagery here hun, love the ending! Beautiful take on a wonderful picture. Such a tranquil read...good luck hunni


  • maralisa silver member
    September 12, 2008

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    a brilliantly beautiful take on the promt julie with ambeiant imagery from stanza one through to the last stanza good luck in the contest my friend marina


  • Amera gold member
    September 11, 2008

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    This is beautiful! It's a fantastic, image filled free verse with a soft flowing tone. This poem has the "ah... " factor. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • storiesuntold gold member
    September 11, 2008

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    Beatiful just beautiful indeed

    You penned this so thr eader could walk within your shoes and touch the magic of the seasons change .Loved it


  • daviscth silver member
    September 11, 2008

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    Simply perfect sis!!! I so envy you your amazing talent with free verse. Good luck in the contest. Love you, Cathy.


  • Topaze
    September 11, 2008

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    Very lovely fine lady, as the dew forms into a gentle drop and falls silent without sound, wonderful. My best wishes always.


  • aboomer silver member
    September 11, 2008

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    Lovely wording and images! Such a soft, peaceful feel to this. I especially like the line,

    'untouched not a footprint left in the sand.'

    Nicely done!
    best wishes in your contest.


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    September 11, 2008

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    Profound & visual...

    You're brilliant at expressing imagery...
    Never fails to astound me as I read your work...
    'Tis wonderful narrative, rhythm & flow (not that I've come to expect anything less from you now)
    As always, leaves me breathless, speechless & contemplative...
    Well done!!!

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