Calm was the day the world stood still,
as clouds billowed up and opened it's gills.
The inhalation sucked the waters from the land ,
as the clouds turned black and spit it out again.
The air takes on a salty heavy lure,
as the gates of hell opens up for sure.
Bright lightening like fingers grip the earth,
as it embraces and rips and tears as it has since birth.
Small is man for the destruction at hand,
It takes the lead and violently stands.
The only thing on earth which we have no control,
is Natures hand as the storm grows.
Still waters sucked out into the bay ,
leaving the floor of the ocean barren and blank.
Hear the roar of the wave now building 3 stories high,
and now the rain like bullets that comes large stones of ice.
For the man who stands against nature,
a fool for all to see.
It's unreal how humans can be so naive.
To believe he can stay and save possessions listen here,
to find fear and emptiness of the loss of his loved ones so dear.
As the storm subsides and eyes look upon the land,
now barren where once a town did stand .
Wiped clean by its furry loved ones lost,
for this land comes at a tremendous cost.
Author notes
My sister stayed for a hurricane party it blew out their windows and shok the apartment which was brand new apart a piece at a time .
She was pregnant and when they left the apartment and had to go out into the storm their car windows were all blown out .Driving against the fury of the wind and rain found themselves stuck in a filed for the wind blew their car off the road .The left the car and when she got out their was a pole near by which she held onto and her legs were pulled out from under her and was pulled out toward the stoem . She lost that baby and barely got by with her life but never again will she stay for another storm for once you have had all the air sucked from your lungs and cant breath from the fury of a storm and live through it you never go back for seconds
A contest entry
- Tom Barron Scottish Landscape Painter, Artist & Musician Multiple Prompts Contest by Kazytc.
2400 points, ended September 16, 2008, 35 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Whew
that is indeed one intense storm. i never thought i would see the day where one poet could write such tremendous yet powerful words to write about it. Good Write!
Keep up the great work. You did a wonderful job with this piece.
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A sad drama unfolded as you wrote this poem..The cruelty of nature as it unleashes her power through a storm..My sympathies on the loss and tragedies to your family...A powerful write!
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Oh how sad. As I read this I was thinking about IKE & the destruction it will be causing. I am sorry about your sister's baby, I know how she feels. It is something you can never get over. I moved back to Florida so I knowhow these storms act. Thank you for sharing, & good luck in the contest. ~~Iridessa~~
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Powerful, with some lovely imagery, but an occasional clumsy phrase, such as in the second to last stanz
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You have my empathy. A fine write and warning. You expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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This is a good piece of work and timely considering the city of Houston's resolve to ride out hurricane Ike. I read your authors notes when did the incident with your sister occur. Happy trails
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A brilliantly penned poem, but what a tragic tale! I feel for you and yours. God bless you all.
Slayer
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Wow this is epic!
This is a fabulous pen which in its epic form really captures the essence of the painting, you are sort of riding with the forthcoming storm!
Very dramatic and powerful too you feel the atmosphere all around you. Talent here and such rich poetic graphics too. Thor/Odin would love you!
Well done love it! Bravo!
Best of luck in the contest and thanks for the honour of your excellent entry!
Poetic Hugs & Thanks Millions!
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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There is power, strength, fear and sadness woven into this work which I like very much.
Very sad AN, thank you !! -
a brilliant poem full of some brilliant descriptive metophors and great emotions good luck in the contest
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I liked the fury and imaginings of this piece and how it reflects man and nature combined in the world.
You A.N made me sad and i understand how deeply this poem was written.
Thanks
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Beautifully crafted poem hun
I love the way you paint the image yet unique your style also show compassion and thoughts
and then your AN tells another story
Love you
Julie
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