So this is tomorrow
This is the world
Life is deceiving
When your a girl
Modest and coy
and shamefully quite
Honestly now
I cannot buy it
Your waiting for me
To be who you want me to be
Your pleading with me
To be what the world wants to see
I cant be that girl
I cant be the one
Who gives into the fairy tale endings
The one who submits
To life's on going refrain
Let me be who I am
And take it in stride
I wont end up being
A beautiful bride
I am life in its essence
escaping the norm
I will not sit quietly
during the storm
So please understand
That I'm something complex
Something mere deviance
seems to forget
I am not that girl
I am not the one
I am not in a fairytale ending
Please tell me what you think
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wow
That was a beautifully written piece. The more I read from you the more I seem drawn to you, and your writing. This piece told me a tragic story of a girl who has grown up without the attention and care that the very essence of everyone of us needs.
The lines, Let me be who I am
And take it in stride
I wont end up being
A beautiful bride
Almost made me cry, because this girl has grown to believe that even on the best day of her life, the public proclimation of love, that no one will see her as beautiful. Tragic, unforgivably tragic. Content wise there is nothing, nothing, that needs revision. Grammically there are some mispelled words but that's it. Thank you for bareing your soul and letting us read this story.
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Very static theme, with each line growing more and more in emotion. Watch your contractions.
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